Halloween Party

YEAH, THAT'S LIKELY TO HAPPEN.

She should dump the wannabe cuckold and marry a MAN. Flush this piece of shit 'story'.

5 for a good story and effort and.....

because the asshole of LIT hated it and gave it a 1!! So eat shit dear annony!

Hi Bonnie, having a good day I hope.

Story is lame on all accounts.
He does not have long to be with her.
She is getting sick of his fetish.
She has now remembered that she is sexy and there are better men out there.
I would say within 5 years they are divorced.
But on the good side he will be able to sit at home getting excited about how much cock she is taking on. Cuckold's dream come true.

What a weird fetish, wanting to see your wife suck some stranger's cock.

If you ever recover from your psychological dysfunction and are fortunate enough to persuade a woman to marry you, don't let her read this story. If she's already bailed on you, well, at least you were married to an intelligent woman, for a while.

Hot scene

It isn't much of a story, but it's a hot sex scene about a VERY common fantasy. I've been to many parties like this one, but never a vanilla party! Aside from that, it was fairly realistic in the way it was told.

One minor quibble: "piss hole" has to be the least erotic term ever used in an erotic story. Please try to avoid using that term in the future!

Well...

First, thanks for making the effort to write and share what seems to be a common male fantasy, at least on LW. But you have to admit, this really isn't so much a story as it is a vignette, a scene with no context.

There are certain cliches that make me cringe and I'm not talking about giant penises that stay hard for hours and ejaculate across the room. No, it's describing women with numbers, which you do in the first paragraph. Then, the second paragraph contains the phrase, "Don't get me wrong", usually used by an author who is backtracking. (There are others, too, notably, "We finally wound up ...", or suchlike, but I think you avoided that old chestnut.) Well, I feel much better getting that off my chest. Keep writing! ***

Love a good party

Love playing at a great party. Wish I'd been invited. Great story. Xoxoxox Annette

It's A Read**

Thanks for writing,

First off - this isn't a story

More like a paragraph. Not enough information to make it a story. And as a flash paragraph it wasn't good at all. The husband has some weird desire to see his wife with another man. Why? So she can find someone with a bigger dick to love and leave her husband? To find someone that fucks her better? Has more money? Or catches some nasty disease? Even for fiction it makes no sense.
1 star.

Kind of like observing two people fucking from several hundred feet away....

....you can't mistake what they're doing, but it really isn't very interesting and certainly not very exciting....why? Hot and enticing are in the detail. One must be close enough to share in the experience in order to truly appreciate it.
Now you offered considerable sensual detail in the sex scene, but the story, if it can be called that, offered no real information about the characters. It sort of read like a narration of a three legged sack race......completely lacking in character interest.
So, it comes off newsy, but we aren't given a chance to become attached to any character....all for lack of telling us who they are, what they like and dislike, their attitudes about family, marriage, lifestyle, day to day experiences and general attitudes.
I think most of the criticism attached at some point to this missing element.
Other than the fact that it is yet another repeat of the now completely tired and overdone cuckold fantasy piece.
Thanks for being willing to risk.

Thanks For Staying With It

I enjoyed the two stories you published last June so I was glad to see you are still at it. As some have mentioned, it could have been longer, with more detail, building up more heat. But it was still enjoyable for me to read because I actually experienced something like your narrator did. I was at a party, found myself sitting on the floor next to a fun woman who gave another guy a blowjob to completion while I watched from inches away. Seeing her cheek bump out when the head of his dick contacted it from inside, hearing him moan as he finally spurted in her mouth, and seeing her swallowing his cum, was one of the hottest things I had ever seen.

I'll be watching for more.

Thanks.