by ATwistedMind
I loved this gentle 'first time' story. I guess that it was what you wish rather than what happened. Please write more like this.
That was a brilliant 'first-time' story! I can't believe it was the first you ever wrote, it was brilliant! Well done...hope to see lots more like it very soon!
It was pretty good but it reminded me of The Notebook and it was too "I love you" mushy. The mushy stuff is romantic for sure, but too much can be nauseating. I loved it though. Some pointers for next time. Be more graphic about your private areas. Like what happened before the sex. You can say the guy had a massive bulge in his pants and you stroked it over his jeans or something. Other than that, it was awesome!!!!