Cast Your Bread Upon the Waters

I liked it.

Well written, of course, and no cucks here. A man can have a fiery wife and not be submissive, at least I don't think I am. Have to ask my wife. Seriously, I hope, this was a good story, not sure about the crying but everyone is different. Thanks for sharing this with us.

Wait for it, wait for it... I gave you a 5 star rating.

Good Read****

Very enjoyable. Thanks for sharing

Whole lot of nothing

It was mercifully short. The plot was so slender it was nearly invisible. The husband was a hand wringing ball of nothing. The wife was an epically stupid caricature of a person. Every character was poorly developed and poorly executed. Just a really bad effort from an author who can do so much better. Very disappointing from this author.

if she hadn't play she would still be married

Stupid woman

Anyone who believes a BS in psych is worth anything in the job market should have their head examined.

I'm sure this story succeeded in the areas where you wanted it to. I come on this site for another though. Your story just didn't cater to that.

Talent at work here, for sure

But the story seemed a bit rushed and probably laid down in a single sitting. Still, good construction, grammar, and flow. Like a lot of first person Lit. stories, it reads like a bar room tale. About one beer's worth. Nice bit of fluff.

A story about a man who worked really hard to make his marriage a success

It's sad that after all that love he showered on her she didn't appreciate it. It is a great pity that other husbands aren't as forgiving as Chase.
L

Slipping away

It seems to me that chase and Susan ruined this marriage, Chase wasn't spending anytime with young wife and Susan wasn't trying to better marriage. I learned a long time ago, that both need to put into a marriage but in this case neither did. From first sentence, I never heard one word of something they did together. Once Chase thought marriage was slipping he threw towel in and wouldn't even put an effort. SubconsciouslyI think chase wanted out because he wanted Ginger. It's amazing how he had time for marriage and loving for Ginger because he wanted it to work.

No love there

It seems to me at the husband liked his wife, but love, no. And that's not a bad thing, in fact I was him once in my life so I really can relate. I actually think this happens a lot in the so called "High School sweethearts" marriages. I've never seen the actual statistics on this, but I'll bet they are very, very high in divorce amongst these types of marriage. Like I say, although I didn't marry my High School sweetie , we did live together for almost four years and in the end it just fizzled out instead of a major cratering , due to the fact that we both matured into something different than our Teen aged selves.
I really liked this story Carvohi , it was a accurate slice of real life !
5*'s
Cpprcrk

Good One!

This story makes a lot of sense. No kids, no stranglehold, no reason to get upset, just face reality and move on. Susan proved to be a stupid, ungrateful woman - not good wife material and definitely not good mother material. Chase did not really lose all that much, he had gained wisdom from his experience with Susan. Hopefully that wisdom is what led him back to Ginger. Ginger while on briefly described seem to be very direct and focused. Honesty is the best place to start a marriage and the best place to keep it. The plot felt good, it felt real, and we were not dragged through any unnecessary pain and suffering - thanks.

ALL THAT FAUX KNOWLEDGE

is not only dangerous, but detracts from what life should be about, TK U MLJ LV NV

This is a short story...so...

This is a short story...so the day by day relationship between this couple wasn't well described...The core of the story is that he always stand by her, supported her decision to go college again, was even proud of her decision...Of course he wasn't a man of confrontations...her day by day behavior, her cheating, opened a hole in his heart from where his love trickled down fast...He also had a lot of time to think about the other woman he dated in college...All these facts set this end...I just don't agree with one thing: Lover boy didn't love his wife, he just wanted her, if he really loved her he would try to marry her...but no...he was just a predator...3*

I like it !

Short...to the point....have seen many women become stupid once they feel they are educated. Walmart is a good place for her...she is making big money for all her education. Oh yes....very descriptive. You get a 5 for a great btb story.

I have read some time ago

most married couples, each has a new partner in the wings if the current relationship hits the skids... If my memory is correct the percentage is 50% +or-... Thus the story patterns this theory. 5

Only Fair

Not up to your previous standards.

Minor point – she should have stayed in community college for the full two years. It’s a lot less expensive than the first two years at a four-year college. Then she transfers to a four-year school as a Junior. Worst case, she might need to take a couple of extra courses that weren’t offered at the community college.

For those who say that he didn’t “work” at the marriage, I say that he simply recognized the obvious: that she now felt superior to him and wanted out, and any attempts to fight it would be met with more of the same.

There is really only one answer to her “proposal”: We’re married. As long as we’re married there are going to be no gatherings with other men, I don’t care how “cosmopolitan” they are. If that doesn’t work for you, then you can have a divorce. Well, she DID more or less agree to that, but how sincere was she?

“I meant seeing other men as in seeing them in group discussions." - “Group” discussions usually include both sexes, so why did she feel the need to specify seeing “other men”?

I love how she expects him to happily accept her proposal for an “open marriage”, but as soon as she thinks that HE’S found someone else, she gets all upset!

And Ryan! He wants to be able to “see” Susan when he wants, the idea of actually having her full-time sets him back a bit!

Why he thinks that Ginger, with her “flashes of jealousy”, would never pull a “Fletcher” is puzzling. Jealous people are not immune from cheating, heck, they are some of the worse cheaters! Their own cheating fuels their jealousy, they think that THEIR cheating, so everyone else must be too!

“I swear she didn't have on a bra, and with the top three buttons undone...well.” – Not to be crude, but if she’s “flat as a board”, what’s the big deal?

This story might be best appreciated with a beer and a shot of hooch

It's your basic barroom or neighborhood barbecue yarn told in tight, economical fashion by one of nature's noblemen. There's emotion there but the narrator is not wearing it on his sleeve. The BIG picture is that he's better off without her. Everything flows from that . His strength is that he isn't driven to play tit for tat , to force confrontation over egregious and hurtful texts.

Once she outs herself - there's no reason to hang on and fight for hopelessly sundered marriage, no kids, no property of significant worth to divvy up. So smile and grease the skids for her exit and move on. Carovhi could have pandered to Loving Wives audience by inputting some surefire stomach roilers like revealing hurtful text contents , setting up trap to reveal beyond doubt the cheaters' deception or fighting over property allotment in divorce settlement.

But that would have gone against the narrator's precepts and mores. He ushered her out of life with all possible drama avoided. Nice. He theoretically got snookered into paying for education but then Chase reaped the best of what Susan had to offer during her prime years so maybe it is win/win after all ?

BTW when one party of married couple does contemptuous habitual eye roll thing like Susan did. Studies have shown the union is in deep trouble. Carovhi wrote a subdued crash and marital burn here with same sure grace Chase bid farewell to faithless spouse. Solid narrator, solid read. I thank Carvohi for sharing.

Good Quicky

As with all your stories, I liked reading it and will probably read it again soon ( second readings often give a slightly different perspective). It was a fun read and the ending was predictive. For that reason I gave it a 4.
Thanks for sharing your effort.

Standard but entertaining

Good quick standard lw story. Writing was good.

Might have fleshed out the how he found about the cheating but not sure that would have worked as well given you wanted a short flash story.

3*s

I'm busy reading a long, complicated fiction book. Then the non-fiction articles on the 'net. But had a very little time on my hands so I looked at this story, carvohi.
Well written little story. 3*s and thanks, lol.


AMerryman

I have read most of our stories. I like your main character's self confidence and real self esteem. Real love has to begin with having self worth that is shared with someone who has self worth to share with you.This story is the perfect example of this th

I have read many of your stories. I like your main character's self confidence and self esteem. Real love is a partnership where each partner brings value to their union in their confidence that they will enhance the others life. Self esteem makes one able to stand alone and make a better partner in a loving relationship.

Not very good

This was a pale imitation of a good LW story, not the real thing. The characters were just sketched out. The punctuation was just awful. Someday, this author will read a grammar lesson and learn how to use commas and semicolons. Not up to his usual standards for plot and it belonged in non-erotic because it wasn't. Please try harder next time.

I always like reading your stories.

I expected this to be a flash story, after the intro. I usually like a thorough character development and plot development to keep my attention up. The ending was pretty much expected. On the descriptions, I thought that you stopped before you did a thorough job, but maybe it was just me.
4 *'s

Lather, rinse, repeat

Pretty straightforward, standard, boilerplate, LW plot, featuring the usual cast of characters: the apathetic husband who doesn't seem to care all that much about his wife, the brain-dead wife who asks hubby to see other men (completely out of the blue), the boring details of the divorce, the happily-ever-after ending for hubby and his new (hotter) bride, and the unhappy ending for the selfish whore who realizes too late what she lost.

Later, rinse, repeat. There must be a template for these stories somewhere. Just replace the names of the characters, hit submit, and await your four-star rating.

I just love the comments

Some really make me chuckle. Not a bad little tale, it was entertaining. No burn the bitch, no destruction, no elaborate scheme to get even, just a cool less dramatic way to end a marriage. Who fooled who? It's not always greener on the other side of the fence. Thanks for the entertaining read and allowing the reader to participate by allowing comments and voting. Seems like some authors have started a trend to not allow voting and delete comments that don't praise them. Sad, it's their loss, since I'm not going to read any story that doesn't allow me to participate. (ML) 4*

@swingerjoe

You're right. Just a standard cheating wife tale. Basically what I like to read. Different degrees of revenge, a lot of justice and a happy ending for the betrayed husband. I know you're familiar with my circumstances so this should be no surprise. And thank you for the acknowledgement. Carvohi, thanks for the great flash tale.

Five Stars

Nice story, good flow, God ending

Always like your stories, another dumb wife bits the dust.

1*

usual boring carvohi drivel.

Always glad to see a new story, carvohi. Hope the next is just as entertaining.
oshaw

5

to help the writer and to offset the asshole of LIT's 1 vote

good read

5*

Liked It But...

About 24 hours between the marriage-ending confrontation and committing to a new marriage to a woman he hasn't seen while she got married and either divorced or widowed? They are different people than they were in high school. This guy makes bad decisions.

Fun

T.T.

Lightweight

This is a common LW theme: a cheating wife who doesn't much try to hide what she is doing, and a cold, heartless husband who makes hardly any effort to keep her. In fact, reading between the lines, we wonder if he is more concerned about his pride than about his wife. The husband is distant, aloof, and cooly analytical. His wife, perhaps starved for affection, takes up with another man, claiming he is just a friend. We all know where that will lead, and it does. Sure, the wife is dishonest with herself and with her husband, expecting him to believe that her relationship with her friend will remain platonic. But the husband doesn't seem to care; his pride is more important! Were these two people ever truly married? Or just comfortable and convenient roommates? As is often the case in these types of super-cool-husband stories, another and even better woman is right there, ready to snap him up! What an ego boost! A competently written story but as another reader wrote, just a barroom tale, about one beer's worth.

Always grateful for a finished story from you

You are a great writer and I always give you 5* for your finished works to offset the jerks that inhabit this category.

Boring tale about a thoroughly unlikable guy. But, credit where it's due, he didn't hire someone to rape her or keep her captive at gunpoint this time, so barber you're making progress on that anger and misogyny there.

Still only worth over star though, as it was uninteresting and not even remotely erotic.

ANOTHER shitty tale about an overbearing asshole!

Poorly written, stilted dialogue, and as weak as first person always is. Why not try to write from an omniscient viewpoint about characters who aren't perfect, in a world where everything isn't black and white? It might be fun, for a change.

I disagree

I never understood how it is misogyny for a man to want to leave out of a failing pointless marraige. Personally l, this story exhibits the problem most flash stories have. The character and plot development is lacking. Hence why it seems so black and white.

good story!

Don't listen to that nonce foreskinblister!!!! He is too tied up in his mum's cellar to do anything but piss himself and wank his diseased little micropenis!!! He screeches misogyny at the drop of his semen dribble!!!

Yawn....

... Went sleeping....

Like the main character

It could have used a little grit. There was no conflict, so there was really no resolution. Everything just was as it was.

Soggy bread

Words in search of a story. Actions in search of a plot. A synopsis of a Ciffnotes summary. What's a reader to do? See...if I read aimlessly, nothing makes sense. If you write aimlessly, you don't make cents.

So WHY did you write this? What spotlight on life are you illuminating here? I'm just not seeing it. My guess...somebody named Ryan Flecther wanted his name in a story, or you have it in for someone named Ryan Fletcher.

Another 5* story

Sadly this happens when some poor chap pays for his wife to go through university and she dumps him for a lecturer.

Ok story

If the house was under water, and turned out to be worth less than he thought, how did he buy her out?

Was a bit plot light for my taste. The short chat with ginger was v good. I only wish she was a major character

Chilley

Some of these comments are just too stupid.

You ask me; a guy gets married, put his wife through college, she starts to cheat, and he cashes in and moves on. He was lucky he had another woman who still wanted him even after he'd already ditched her for the skank.

It's pretty much a safe story, nothing especially new, but no one got shot, raped, beaten up, or thrown in a dumpster.

Still, some of comments make me wonder if we were reading the same story. For once we ought to be thankful carvohi wrote a quickie. He usually takes ten pages what he could have said in two. Not too shabby. I gave it a five.

First Born 374

Well Jed - a few questions

How does he start a construction business with no money? The law requires him to have a certain amount of working capitol or he can't even get a license.
What does having two older brothers have to do with being thin skinned or sensitive?
Why would he offer her more than a 50/50 split?
Why would he give her anything if the house was under water? She has NO half as half of nothing is nothing.
Why would she sign off without looking at the papers? Besides, the Court would require her signature to be notarized to be legal.
Why would he want to marry someone with a volcanic temper? Isn't that like stepping out of the frying pan into the fire? And why even consider getting married so quickly? Most states have a cooling off period before he could legally get remarried.
If Ginger was a good Catholic she wasn't getting married anyway. In the eyes of the Catholic Church she's STILL married to her first husband and she sure didn't get the married annulled in the eyes of the Church that quickly, if at all. So no remarriage in the Catholic Church for her.
And you never said what school Susan graduated from but a BS in Psychology from a good school would have enabled her to get a decent job in a number of fields, including working for a school district.
Too many holes in this to make for a decent read. Maybe next time.

Back to basics

In a good way. Your narrator kept some details (such as the content of the texts, and how he got them) and feelings close to the vest, making for a somewhat light-hearted affair out of something that could have been more dramatic, but it was short enough to avoid that detracting much from the story.

As someone else pointed out, overly jealous people are just as likely to cheat, if not more so, than others. That aside, the back and forth with her at the restaurant seemed a unique conversation.

Thanks for the story. I certainly enjoyed it.

Cog

how is this in ANYWAY the husbands fault ?

it is not no surprise that a professional douche Bag like frontline masturbater would blame the Husband... but the fact is that if the husband is paying for the wife's entire college education and he has work some extra hours... then it is NOT unreasonable to say that she should NOT be fucking n other men

This is the inverse of many real situations

Back fifty years ago this happened regularly to wives. They put their hubbies through graduate school, law school or med school and then were dropped for a more appropiate model. Perhaps this influenced the drastic change in the attitude toward the men who divorced their wives. Perhaps the present scenario is growing nowadays. Personally I would say that the moment you start disrespecting the other person it is over.

as far as the story goes this is REALLY good

For some reason that I'm not sure of this entire story really appeal to me. I think that's the way the author structured the whole story. This is a one a few times that actually really identified with or at least thought I could identify with the husband character

For example this sentence here is really quite powerful

"I went upstairs, checked Susan's empty closet, I looked around the room; everything was the same, and nothing was the same "

It's not a very complicated story in terms of the plot but the character development of the husband is really quite well done. I must say I am pleasantly surprised.
4 stars