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The Magic Box Ch. 01

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by Anonymous

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by ap2tech03/24/16

Decent start

Not too bad. Could use some cleaning up here and there. A few grammar/punctuation errors but readable.
I hope the next part is a little better.

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by C_frommn04/04/16

Nice Start

Can't wait to see where he Takes it from here. Do the girls come back Does he make them and others his Loving Slaves.

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by zena9904/20/16

Loved It

I agree with the grammar comment. But overall this was a nice story. It will be interesting to see where it leads as he figures out the capabilities of his new toy.

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