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You Forgot...
...to say April Fools!!! I call Bull S#!T.
Needed slower pacing frankly.
15 inches for fuck sake
Uninstall word plz
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Seriously? You forgot to put
- Ridiculous Fiction - in the tag lines.....
quick end !!!!!
Finish the story, she's hooked on his cock, and then her belly will swell !!!!
seriously?
15? That's a very VERY big stretch of the imagination even for this site. (No pun intended)
It is today first of April if you think 15 inches. I quit reading if penis is more than 8 inches and breasts are DD or more.
2 hrs to Beach?
Most hotels in Myrtle Beach can see the ocean!
Yeah I'm sorry but it was a ok start but such a bad story so unbelievable
grammar?
Agreed with other comments, but the major issue was grammar. Your sentences had no continuity jumping and skipping around with erratic movement. There were no smooth transitions...great promise, but be realistic and slow down your pace
Ugh
Completely unbelievable.
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