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2 short
Nice start but too short and not descriptive enough. Has the potential for a hot series. Looking forward to part two with more detail.
Good start
Nice start. It was a bit on the short side ;) but keep writing!
very nice
I agree with other two respondants, good start but to short and could be more descriptive. I liked the tenderness of the encounter. Keep up the good work...
Not bad
Not bad for the first story. Like the previous readers said, it was a really nice start, but you rushed the sex part - you could also have been a bit more descriptive. The encounter itself is very hot, the story has a good potential. Time to finish part 2!
I'm Slovenian, too. I know it can be hard to write in a foreign langauge - don't give up! You're doing great!
More
Yes, so sexy. I have been with professional shemales but never on a "pickup". Be more discreptive with next one.
Hard as a rock
Wish I could encounter such a girl
Obviously your first...
Found wanting to read another story very quickly. .5 out of 5
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