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Interesting
Interesting but way too short of a start! More please.
too short
definitely too short didn't even leave me wanting more or wondering what next
It okay but...
I really think you need a proofreader.
Yep.
Don't take this the wrong way, but that was just about as bad as I thought it would be. And that's a good thing. I'm a fan of cheesy science fiction B-movies, and this read like a late-80's porn parody of the genre, so it's fun in that sense. I do agree that you need a proofreader, and that this effort was a bit too short, but keep working at it.
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What you would call repetative.
What you would call repetative.
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