imhapless seemed to be leading up to discovery of Courtney's affair, but couldn't work out the story logistics, leaving one huge, unapologetic and awkward red herring. I could go on with other flaws but will forebear the tedious process. This author has talent and numerous first rate tales to his credit . There are a healthy number of clunkers as well. Ah well, I did enjoy the art subplot.
He was worried about her going off with John and then at the end it was Tom?
Okay, maybe the trip with John was a cover for meeting up with Tom, but if that was the case you were being too cute withholding information (not even a clue) the reader might have needed.
Odd they'd both be out of town at the same time, but since her trip was legit you steered us off in a different direction without even a hint of anything bubbling below the surface.
Could have been a really interesting story instead of a confusing one.
Okay his wife was cheating on him, he was clueless but supposedly he loved her, one night out on the town with his wife's friend, two missed cell phone calls = she is cheating on him so he decides to cheat on his wife, he cheats on his wife with a much better specimen that her, they are instantly in love and soon to be mated for life in a world where husbands are clueless and all the women cheat? Happy ending? Happy Horseshit!
"Why are you so concerned about him all of the time?" – Why is she so dismissive of his concerns and so defensive of John?
“I didn't like his comment that last time that I told him that only I dance slow dances with you," – What was his comment? Don’t throw a clue like that in our faces without detail to let us judge it’s appropriateness!
"Yes, along with two other people," – Turns out to be a lie – not a good sign!
“strapless, sleeveless, backless and shoulderless” – Not to be my nit-picking self, but I think it is at BEST highly unusual for a strapless dress to have shoulders and/or sleeves!
I’m not comfortable with his cheating with no knowledge of Courtney’s cheating, not even a solid suspicion, just an uneasiness at his calls not being answered.
“lifted up her dress to expose her panty-less crotch” –One thing that always gets me in these stories is how these women, with their “gushing” pussies, go pantyless and somehow never get their dresses wet!
I agree with those who say that the ending was rushed, there should definitely have been a scene where Courtney revealed her cheating with Tom, and while she said "something happened on the trip", it at least SEEMS like there was something already going on there, so was there or not? The red herring with John was a cheap shot, and did Katrina know about Tom and Courtney and was that behind her seduction? Because if not, then THEY are just as bad as Tom and Courtney! And Kevin is, in any case, because he cheated BEFORE he knew about Courtney cheating!
which puts it way up in my book.
[[As to the commenters who seem to believe that Tom and Courtney were having an affair, WHAT? It was Courtney and John? How did you come up with Tom?]]
I enjoy reading stories that have a purpose, and I'm not quite sure what the purpose of this story is intended to be. Neither Kevin and Courtney's nor Tom and Katrina's marriage seemed loving or strong, so the twin divorces seemed inevitable. There was no investment in either marriage from the reader's standpoint.
Was Kevin's affair with Katrina his reaction to his wife's suspected affair? Or would he have slept with Katrina either way? I guess we'll never know.
I don't like to comment on comments on my story, but...
I honestly do not see how anyone can assume that Courtney and Tom are together; there is nothing in the last paragraphs that says they are; they were vacillating on working on their marriages with Kevin and Katrina; sorry, I just don't see how this could be misinterpreted. In any event I assure you that Courtney and Tom were NOT having an affair with each other, and were not getting together.
I think the last paragraph is confusing to some people because of the way it is worded: "I don't know about Courtney and Tom, but I've never looked back."
I think what the author meant was: "I don't know what happened to either Courtney or Tom, but I've never looked back."
Because the word "and" was used there, some folks think the two of them are together.
I thought you built up the story well and developed an interesting protagonist and described the relationships well. Then you twisted things with the sudden business trip with a potential lothario as well as with the seduction after the gala. I thought you kept the pace of the story very consistent and entertaining.
But the ending was so quick and abrupt that you lost me. I think you could have carried the story a little more by fleshing out the aspects of the cheating partners and the breakdown of the relationships. So it isn't a 5* for me.
But I still enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing and please keep writing!
Was Katrina's husband cheating? I understood the story...I don't know if I liked it...Why? 1st - two cheating wives...2nd - one cheating husband, that did the same his wife did...3rd - A false friend that fucked his friend's wife...4th - Had Courtney cheated on her husband before? 5th - Did Courtney's boss, being the CEO of the company she and her lover worked for, and a straight shooter, fired her and her lover for cheating? Too many doubts...2*
Gotta agree with both sides on the last two paragraphs. A quick reading puts C & T together. IMH coulda & shoulda been more careful. The SAME things happened to both of them ... but those things happened to each of them SEPARATELY. C & T may well have never seen each other at ANY time during (or after) C was divorced by Hubby and T divorced Katrina. It was easier (more economical with words) to write it this way. The alternative interpretation just didn't dawn on IMH until the comments came in.
The story was worth reading. Not sure C's adventurous interlude had much effect on her relationship with her equally shallow hubby! Nor do I think Katrina's seduction of Kevin had much effect on Tom, who had been emotionally isolating his wife for some time. Just not very LW!
Seems like you were building up to something then bam the end?
You hinted that the wife might have slept with her coworker.....but nothing
and how does a husband go from in love with his wife to throw her over for a friend's wife....He didn't seem like and asshole to start with. Nor someone led around by his dick.
Honestly just need a more flushed out ending.
Thanks for the story.
Concisely written with believable characters and engaging sex scenes without going over the top. I guess like others I would have liked to see a more developed ending, not because the story needed it so much as just I enjoy reading your stories. Thanks for your efforts!
The story was well written, we could see the beginnings of character development then suddenly it ended with no ending.
Kevin and Katrina were obviously cheating, Courtney may have been cheating and Tom was - I have no idea.
After 3 days it appears K&K ditched their partners and for 4 months C&T "vacillated".
A quick story. Kind of a let down having your spouse not call you for a few days then talk lamely about it- you'd think there'd be more feeling, but I can't be too critical of the author's choices. At least she didn't blather "it was just sex, I still love you and want to stay married" bs. An extra start for avoiding that!
The latter half was extremely rushed and perfunctory, seemed like the author got bored with the story and just wanted to finish things, without fleshing it out so the characters' actions actually made sense.
English
Seemed a bit incomplete at the end.
Could have been very good
imhapless seemed to be leading up to discovery of Courtney's affair, but couldn't work out the story logistics, leaving one huge, unapologetic and awkward red herring. I could go on with other flaws but will forebear the tedious process. This author has talent and numerous first rate tales to his credit . There are a healthy number of clunkers as well. Ah well, I did enjoy the art subplot.
Um, dumb question
He was worried about her going off with John and then at the end it was Tom?
Okay, maybe the trip with John was a cover for meeting up with Tom, but if that was the case you were being too cute withholding information (not even a clue) the reader might have needed.
Odd they'd both be out of town at the same time, but since her trip was legit you steered us off in a different direction without even a hint of anything bubbling below the surface.
Could have been a really interesting story instead of a confusing one.
Two stars.
Ugh
Okay his wife was cheating on him, he was clueless but supposedly he loved her, one night out on the town with his wife's friend, two missed cell phone calls = she is cheating on him so he decides to cheat on his wife, he cheats on his wife with a much better specimen that her, they are instantly in love and soon to be mated for life in a world where husbands are clueless and all the women cheat? Happy ending? Happy Horseshit!
Rushed
"Why are you so concerned about him all of the time?" – Why is she so dismissive of his concerns and so defensive of John?
“I didn't like his comment that last time that I told him that only I dance slow dances with you," – What was his comment? Don’t throw a clue like that in our faces without detail to let us judge it’s appropriateness!
"Yes, along with two other people," – Turns out to be a lie – not a good sign!
“strapless, sleeveless, backless and shoulderless” – Not to be my nit-picking self, but I think it is at BEST highly unusual for a strapless dress to have shoulders and/or sleeves!
I’m not comfortable with his cheating with no knowledge of Courtney’s cheating, not even a solid suspicion, just an uneasiness at his calls not being answered.
“lifted up her dress to expose her panty-less crotch” –One thing that always gets me in these stories is how these women, with their “gushing” pussies, go pantyless and somehow never get their dresses wet!
I agree with those who say that the ending was rushed, there should definitely have been a scene where Courtney revealed her cheating with Tom, and while she said "something happened on the trip", it at least SEEMS like there was something already going on there, so was there or not? The red herring with John was a cheap shot, and did Katrina know about Tom and Courtney and was that behind her seduction? Because if not, then THEY are just as bad as Tom and Courtney! And Kevin is, in any case, because he cheated BEFORE he knew about Courtney cheating!
As usual, unique
which puts it way up in my book.
[[As to the commenters who seem to believe that Tom and Courtney were having an affair, WHAT? It was Courtney and John? How did you come up with Tom?]]
Okay
I enjoy reading stories that have a purpose, and I'm not quite sure what the purpose of this story is intended to be. Neither Kevin and Courtney's nor Tom and Katrina's marriage seemed loving or strong, so the twin divorces seemed inevitable. There was no investment in either marriage from the reader's standpoint.
Was Kevin's affair with Katrina his reaction to his wife's suspected affair? Or would he have slept with Katrina either way? I guess we'll never know.
um...amischiefmaker
you might want to read the last two paragraphs where it's Courtney and Tom together. What!?
I don't like to comment on comments on my story, but...
I honestly do not see how anyone can assume that Courtney and Tom are together; there is nothing in the last paragraphs that says they are; they were vacillating on working on their marriages with Kevin and Katrina; sorry, I just don't see how this could be misinterpreted. In any event I assure you that Courtney and Tom were NOT having an affair with each other, and were not getting together.
Re. Courtney and Tom
I think the last paragraph is confusing to some people because of the way it is worded: "I don't know about Courtney and Tom, but I've never looked back."
I think what the author meant was: "I don't know what happened to either Courtney or Tom, but I've never looked back."
Because the word "and" was used there, some folks think the two of them are together.
Ended a Little Abruptly
I thought you built up the story well and developed an interesting protagonist and described the relationships well. Then you twisted things with the sudden business trip with a potential lothario as well as with the seduction after the gala. I thought you kept the pace of the story very consistent and entertaining.
But the ending was so quick and abrupt that you lost me. I think you could have carried the story a little more by fleshing out the aspects of the cheating partners and the breakdown of the relationships. So it isn't a 5* for me.
But I still enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing and please keep writing!
Was Katrina's husband cheating?
Was Katrina's husband cheating? I understood the story...I don't know if I liked it...Why? 1st - two cheating wives...2nd - one cheating husband, that did the same his wife did...3rd - A false friend that fucked his friend's wife...4th - Had Courtney cheated on her husband before? 5th - Did Courtney's boss, being the CEO of the company she and her lover worked for, and a straight shooter, fired her and her lover for cheating? Too many doubts...2*
Last two ...
Gotta agree with both sides on the last two paragraphs. A quick reading puts C & T together. IMH coulda & shoulda been more careful. The SAME things happened to both of them ... but those things happened to each of them SEPARATELY. C & T may well have never seen each other at ANY time during (or after) C was divorced by Hubby and T divorced Katrina. It was easier (more economical with words) to write it this way. The alternative interpretation just didn't dawn on IMH until the comments came in.
The story was worth reading. Not sure C's adventurous interlude had much effect on her relationship with her equally shallow hubby! Nor do I think Katrina's seduction of Kevin had much effect on Tom, who had been emotionally isolating his wife for some time. Just not very LW!
nice beginning, but the ending what the heck????
Seems like you were building up to something then bam the end?
You hinted that the wife might have slept with her coworker.....but nothing
and how does a husband go from in love with his wife to throw her over for a friend's wife....He didn't seem like and asshole to start with. Nor someone led around by his dick.
Honestly just need a more flushed out ending.
Thanks for the story.
Another fun read, 5 stars.
Concisely written with believable characters and engaging sex scenes without going over the top. I guess like others I would have liked to see a more developed ending, not because the story needed it so much as just I enjoy reading your stories. Thanks for your efforts!
What happened?
The story was well written, we could see the beginnings of character development then suddenly it ended with no ending.
Kevin and Katrina were obviously cheating, Courtney may have been cheating and Tom was - I have no idea.
After 3 days it appears K&K ditched their partners and for 4 months C&T "vacillated".
Think you got bored
And then rushed the ending.
Thanks***
For the read.
What the hell happened?
You got really THAT bored with your story?Great plot,asinine ending...
Concise
A quick story. Kind of a let down having your spouse not call you for a few days then talk lamely about it- you'd think there'd be more feeling, but I can't be too critical of the author's choices. At least she didn't blather "it was just sex, I still love you and want to stay married" bs. An extra start for avoiding that!
The latter half was extremely rushed and perfunctory, seemed like the author got bored with the story and just wanted to finish things, without fleshing it out so the characters' actions actually made sense.
Strange
The story took off like a Fourth of July firework and then fizzled like a hang fire. Strange for this author.
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