For me there needs to be some emotion expressed. This story reads like the play by play of a boring baseball game. The main batter gets excited by her story but something in the telling doesn't really convey the excitement. Perhaps if we knew why he gets turned on by her fucking around we might have some insight into him.
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Anonymous06/15/05
I loved it
It is a little play by play'ish, but I loved the story... it is very hot... play by play is good but a one with better flow would be OMG good
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Anonymous08/02/12
great story
Can't wait to send my wife back to school, she agrees.
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A fun story.
Not my favorite type but still good.
Something's missing ...
For me there needs to be some emotion expressed. This story reads like the play by play of a boring baseball game. The main batter gets excited by her story but something in the telling doesn't really convey the excitement. Perhaps if we knew why he gets turned on by her fucking around we might have some insight into him.
I loved it
It is a little play by play'ish, but I loved the story... it is very hot... play by play is good but a one with better flow would be OMG good
great story
Can't wait to send my wife back to school, she agrees.
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