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Nice beginning!
Nice beginning, well written, please continue!
Great
Good opening. Always love your work!
Absolutely lots of promise...
but we're still waiting for another serving of Chinese Takeout also. This story has tons of promise and the heroine is still a virgin. Will the fickle Erik take her to the Frosh Ball as promised, or will her Father show up with his friends, Smith & Wesson? Does Erick only charm HS chickies or does he share with MILF's also? Will he reserve his charms for Jeong, or is he going to take an option on Annie? I wish you could write as fast as I can read, but I'd much rather wait for your talent to deliver the best possible for your urgently demanding audience. Cheers, Happy Dim Sum.
Next Please?!?
Please post the next chapter soon for this fine story! Don't delay, do it now!
TY
Next please?
Should be up Thursday according to Literotica.
Wait...
You said there was no "first time" content, but Dave had his first time, didn't he?
Re: Wait
Damn! You're right. It WAS Dave's first time. Mea culpa. Oh well... LOL
Wow...
Your Author's Note was no joke, cuz that was some seriously sad, depressing shit.
In terms of craft, it's well-written; you're a good writer. And it's certainly a pleasure to encounter erotic fiction writers who aren't middle-class, middle-aged white males.
Judging by the scores, this story's themes and characters resonate favorably with a certain population of readers. However... For myself, the misadventures of some truly deplorable, and morally bankrupt, wealthy misogynists / shitbags (people who should be lined up against a wall and shot) are an adventure I'll opt out of.
Your Author's Note was no joke
Nope, this one isn't my usual sweetness, love and dancing cocker spaniels in green meadows with the sunlight shining down. It's a bit more downbeat, but on the other hand, Erik does get his comeuppance in the yet to be written conclusion, and Jeong does have herself a ball :) so everyone gets what's coming to them.... eventually
Racist shit
Also kind of a rapey bitch, ain't you?
Racist shit? Oh noooo, chiquita....
Ohhhh, it's fun to write. Erik is just such an asshole. You will notice though, that every participant is enthusiastically consenting. Erik might be an asshole, but he likes that "yes .... ohhh yes....". So, rapey? No. Reluctance? Maybe. Fun? For sure.
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