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by jthserra03/11/04

A tender sentiment...

but the rhyme is too forced. You'd be better off either dropping the rhyme, or your syllable count on lines to let the words read true. I think if you worked this poem to about 1/3 its present size, you could say the same thing much more succinctly. With some work this poem could shine...


jim : )

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