If this is your first venture into writing, and English is a second language, I commend you.
The story is erotic; however, in both stories, I didn't understand, the initials and colon that prefaced the character speaking. I don't think it belongs in story writing, but rather in a script.
English
quite descriptive
Detailing is good. But could be better too
nice
Felt like hot
super
Story is superb. Please continue
Congrats
If this is your first venture into writing, and English is a second language, I commend you.
The story is erotic; however, in both stories, I didn't understand, the initials and colon that prefaced the character speaking. I don't think it belongs in story writing, but rather in a script.
Good luck with part 3
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