It is my opinion that an erotic story is first and foremost a story. It obviously should contain hot descriptions of sexual activity but a good sex scene is not sufficient by itself to be the whole story. What you've written is well done but it's just not quite enough to be a 5* submission.
Description of a sex act is not enough. Why two individuals get down to it is what makes a story good. And in a not so long script, you managed to create a really good story, in which the words left unsaid give the real picture.
Looking forward to your next entry.
English
wow..
Thank you for inviting us along for the ride..wow hot stuff sweet lady..great prose..erotically teasing and very pleasing..xxx
Great Story
Thanks, good story, good descriptions and excellent grammar - a follow up I hope---
Fun story
With a cute twist added in at the end. Looking forward to more of your erotic meanderings.
A little incomplete
It is my opinion that an erotic story is first and foremost a story. It obviously should contain hot descriptions of sexual activity but a good sex scene is not sufficient by itself to be the whole story. What you've written is well done but it's just not quite enough to be a 5* submission.
Description of a sex act is not enough. Why two individuals get down to it is what makes a story good. And in a not so long script, you managed to create a really good story, in which the words left unsaid give the real picture.
Looking forward to your next entry.
I agree with mountaincat
The story was OK but no home run.
I liked it :)
I enjoyed this piece and hope you will write more!
Thank you.
Thank you all very much. I do plan to write more, I've just too many irons in the fire at the moment...soon I hope though.
xoxo
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