All Comments on 'Baywatch Secrets Ch. 03: Miranda's Movie'

Two things:

1] I see no mention before "Flamingo" of who it refers to.

2] In what I'd think would be a key part of this type of story, watch your spelling: Does she "lose" the bikini, or simply pull it "loOse"?!

1. Flamingo was meant to be a hint. A lot of the contextual stuff in my stories are extensively researched and meant to be easter eggs for readers who know a little more than average about the women in question. I totally accept that I could've executed better, but wanted to articulate that the intention was always to drop references with room to follow up in future chapters and not having the pov character ponder over every small thing. Thats how we deal in real life when entering a new group with inside jokes and nicknames.

2. Yea.. I could do w some copy editing. Lose it is.

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Nice story, but I wish you described Miranda's pussy in more detail, and what it was like to lick.

Same guy who helped you before with 2 more:

HINT to/of what?

ALSO, the "guide" should be "our", referencing how she met him.