that you make a great many mistakes and dismiss them as okay because you claim it is the way you write. That much is true, but not respectful of the readers. It is simply lazy. Clean up the obvious errors and show some pride in your work.
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Anonymous04/21/16
Doesn't make sense
If the names of the men were also on the monument, why was his wife so surprised that McCarthy was also having sex with Falcone?
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Anonymous04/21/16
Thanks, it was fun.
I knew the asshole husband was a cock sucker as soon as he started pounding the table.
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Anonymous04/21/16
2 star
story coulda been good, but the writer is a mistake in itself.
Story was succinct, had interesting setting , unpretentious with a few humorous moments and decent ' ta da ' moment for close. The part about law school grads scrambling for jobs was on the money as well. I thank wieliczka for sharing.
Short sweet and with a little twist at the end... kinda like a water slide! Thanks for the fairly original (as original as things get here) flash story. Would like to see you tighten it up a little with the grammer but overall I enjoyed it!
Actually, it doesn't matter if the slander istrue.
But if it defames or impugned a persons character then the offending party is liable for slander. In this case, your Mrs. Brad Falcone, the cemetery and the owner and any directors such as his daughter.
In light of that, allow me to offer a less humorous, but more likely scenario where the victims attorney shows that, as in the Gawker vs Hogan lawsuit, cheating isn't illegal but defaming a persons reputation is. Throw in a 115 million dollar lawsuit designed to impoverish the cometary and what you get is a cemetery being auctioned off and the daughters legal future in serious jeopardy.
Actually since the legal definition of slander, libel and defamation all specifically say making untrue statements it does matter.
Of course anyone can sue for anything and defending against frivolous suits does cost time and money.
But then is it worth turning a local scandal into a national headline news story?
Since lawsuits are a matter of public record they cannot be held out of the public eye.
Sorry, but I am too fucking old to not dismiss the sensibilities of my readers, but I warn them in advance on how I write. AND IT GIVE THEM THE OPTION TO LEAVE. I have stated specifically that if it bothers you , please don't read my stuff. It's not arrogance. The "world" does not adapt to us. It's 'gonna' do and care and feel what it wants to be. If you feel that, in this market place, it is something that you like. GREAT. If it pisses you off that 'proper' writing is not followed, don't be part it. The world does not revolve around you,or me. Wieliczka
Fun little piece, nicely done and yes, your first person wiring can be a tad difficult to read. Is not that your style is wrong, it's probably just the way most people learn to read. As a reader, I only expect proper grammar because that's what I was taught. As an adult, reading and trying to put myself into the mind of a character, this style works pretty well, so I say bravo and thanks for sharing. Have read most of your work, and look forward to the next offering!
Rneb
And I agree whole heatedly on the spelling and grammar freaks. Finally had to put a 'disclaimer' at he end of mine.'If you're not volunteering to be an editor you don't get to comment on it.' You would think that someone that is that into spelling and grammar would have the brains to realize that those of us that aren't can't REALLY find our own mistakes...
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Anonymous04/26/16
By the way, my writing style for first person narrations includes sentence fragments, non-grammatically correct sentences,... This is my style. I'm not gonna change. If it bothers you, please don't read my stories.
So you're just lazy?
Would have taken a second, if that, to change SENT to SEND
"Darlene could you please sent in Mr. and Mrs. McCarthy and their lawyer"
First time reading your 'work', won't again, its not arrogance on your part, just plain laziness and lack of pride in your work, you want all nice comments or we can bugger off as you 'warned' us.
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Anonymous05/22/16
I Had No Problem With Your Writing Style
Some of the VERY BEST writers write in first person fragmented sentences. After all that is how the vast majority of people speak, even the one's who complain of your writing style. 5 stars. Because it richly deserves it.
English
Thanks***
For the read/
Good and funny read...
Good and funny read...3*
Excellent
You know, a few twerks and this easily could have been in the Humor category. Either way a great tale.
Five Stars
Truth
There is nothing like the truth.
My observation is
that you make a great many mistakes and dismiss them as okay because you claim it is the way you write. That much is true, but not respectful of the readers. It is simply lazy. Clean up the obvious errors and show some pride in your work.
Doesn't make sense
If the names of the men were also on the monument, why was his wife so surprised that McCarthy was also having sex with Falcone?
Thanks, it was fun.
I knew the asshole husband was a cock sucker as soon as he started pounding the table.
2 star
story coulda been good, but the writer is a mistake in itself.
I liked it .
Story was succinct, had interesting setting , unpretentious with a few humorous moments and decent ' ta da ' moment for close. The part about law school grads scrambling for jobs was on the money as well. I thank wieliczka for sharing.
5
for a good story
Short & sweet with a great twist
The glaring flaw is: since the men were also named why didn't the McCarthys and their attorney know about Mr. McCarthy?
It was still a fun read.
Okay that was fun!
Short sweet and with a little twist at the end... kinda like a water slide! Thanks for the fairly original (as original as things get here) flash story. Would like to see you tighten it up a little with the grammer but overall I enjoyed it!
law school grads scrambling for jobs
Things they don't tell you when you look at law school:
Every year there are 45,000 law school grads.
Every year there are 30,000 lawyer job openings.
You too can be a well educated taxi cab driver.
Lots of fun
A fairly complex story told in one page. My congrats.
WHERE EVER HE IS OR ENDS UP
he will still not be in the Top 10 on anyones' list TK U MLJ LV NV
Great...
Five stars... I don't care, it was the punch line that made me laugh.
3*s
An original plot about cheating. Gave you 3*s.
Wieliczka has revenge on the brain,lol. Thanks again.
AMerryman
Actually, it doesn't matter if the slander istrue.
But if it defames or impugned a persons character then the offending party is liable for slander. In this case, your Mrs. Brad Falcone, the cemetery and the owner and any directors such as his daughter.
In light of that, allow me to offer a less humorous, but more likely scenario where the victims attorney shows that, as in the Gawker vs Hogan lawsuit, cheating isn't illegal but defaming a persons reputation is. Throw in a 115 million dollar lawsuit designed to impoverish the cometary and what you get is a cemetery being auctioned off and the daughters legal future in serious jeopardy.
@ Whackdoodle 04/22/16
Actually since the legal definition of slander, libel and defamation all specifically say making untrue statements it does matter.
Of course anyone can sue for anything and defending against frivolous suits does cost time and money.
But then is it worth turning a local scandal into a national headline news story?
Since lawsuits are a matter of public record they cannot be held out of the public eye.
The truth...
Is the ultimate shield against slander and libel
On my writing style
Sorry, but I am too fucking old to not dismiss the sensibilities of my readers, but I warn them in advance on how I write. AND IT GIVE THEM THE OPTION TO LEAVE. I have stated specifically that if it bothers you , please don't read my stuff. It's not arrogance. The "world" does not adapt to us. It's 'gonna' do and care and feel what it wants to be. If you feel that, in this market place, it is something that you like. GREAT. If it pisses you off that 'proper' writing is not followed, don't be part it. The world does not revolve around you,or me. Wieliczka
Short and sweet
Fun little piece, nicely done and yes, your first person wiring can be a tad difficult to read. Is not that your style is wrong, it's probably just the way most people learn to read. As a reader, I only expect proper grammar because that's what I was taught. As an adult, reading and trying to put myself into the mind of a character, this style works pretty well, so I say bravo and thanks for sharing. Have read most of your work, and look forward to the next offering!
Rneb
LOL
Original plot 4*
Love it
And I agree whole heatedly on the spelling and grammar freaks. Finally had to put a 'disclaimer' at he end of mine.'If you're not volunteering to be an editor you don't get to comment on it.' You would think that someone that is that into spelling and grammar would have the brains to realize that those of us that aren't can't REALLY find our own mistakes...
By the way, my writing style for first person narrations includes sentence fragments, non-grammatically correct sentences,... This is my style. I'm not gonna change. If it bothers you, please don't read my stories.
So you're just lazy?
Would have taken a second, if that, to change SENT to SEND
"Darlene could you please sent in Mr. and Mrs. McCarthy and their lawyer"
First time reading your 'work', won't again, its not arrogance on your part, just plain laziness and lack of pride in your work, you want all nice comments or we can bugger off as you 'warned' us.
I Had No Problem With Your Writing Style
Some of the VERY BEST writers write in first person fragmented sentences. After all that is how the vast majority of people speak, even the one's who complain of your writing style. 5 stars. Because it richly deserves it.
The last one was wonderful
Thanks
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