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Good but minor editing needed
As always, this story well told and hot, but could use a bit of editing for spelling, grammar, and structure. Again, these minor things don't detract from the story much at all. Looking forward to part 4.
destinie baby.....
please please let this continue....u hav a wild imagination and thank god for that when u write stories the way u do....please tho, just keep it as the women..much better that way, my opinion tho!!! thanku xxx
Another winner
This series gets better with each chapter. I agree with the other two comments: a little more editing, and keep Daddy out of it.
And the Heat Rolls On!
destinie, destinie! You are doing a great job with these super hot episodes. Keep them coming...the chapters, too!
Your stories are really good, and I agree, just a little more work is needed on grammar, punctuation, and that kind of stuff.
Hotter than Georgia Asphalt
Hot story.
The structure is pretty good and should improve.
A little editing will also help.
I agree with keeping Daddy out....
Perhaps a cousin or boyfriend....later.
Keep your story female please!
I loved your story. I'm a guy but I can see that your heros shouldn't include a man in their sex games. Please keep it all female! There's a time and place for cock and sperm and this isn't necessarily the place. Perhaps you could introduce an aunt or better still a young cousin, who may be 18, but is niaive and comes across as only 14 or so. Your three heroines could introduce their relative to their sexy exploits in a caring and sensitive manner. This would really highten the sexual tension. Keep up the writing, you are superb!!! :)
Love Jim
Just keeps getting better!
Destinie, they just keep getting better and better! Keep it comming! Minor editing stuff here and there, might have something to do with your editor having little on-line access right now....but I'm sure he'll be back in no time!
The_Darkness
Better than ever
this series just keep getting better and leave the dad out i think its better that way
Cousin or boyfriend??? I don't think so...
Obviously those of you who think that a cousin or boyfriend needs to be added don't know Destinie's writing style. Dear God, no boys allowed...PLEASE!!! If any such tragedy should occur, I will be absolutely devastated. Destinie, I look forward to part four.
Good luck!!
I love all three parts...keep going!
P.S. I'm harboring a serious crush on Raine.
Holy Shit!
I really don't know what to write here other than the title but I do know one thing, after reading all three parts, I need a cigarette!
PS looking foward to chapter 4 and leave dad out of it!
Ooooh...liked all three!
Oh man! I liiiiiiiiked these stories! I came a LOT of times! Thanks Don L. for telling me about it!!!!!!!!! See you later ;)
*~Robin~*
Fuckin awesome
Great story, read all three and wow. You gotta keep this goin just leave men out of it!
nice..
get asha in
Loved it
Keep it coming! Great great stuff and very hot!
Speechless
i dont know how you manage to outdo yourself but it is fantastic. i am otherwise speechless,cant wait to read more
at last
ONE OF THE BEST MOTHER/DAUGHTERS STORIES I`VE EVER READ TOLD IN THE MOST SENSUOUS WAYS I`M STILL PANTING,PLEASE WRITE MORE
at last
ONE OF THE BEST MOTHER/DAUGHTERS STORIES I`VE EVER READ TOLD IN THE MOST SENSUOUS WAYS I`M STILL PANTING,PLEASE WRITE MORE
Wow...
Keep them cumming...;>)
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