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a short good start
nice writing.
:)
Loved it! I hope part 2 comes out soon!
GOOD START
This shows promise. Please continue with the story as the writing is very good.
Slick
Good setup, dialogue and setting. The action flowed well, although just a little more description of the common room of the inn would have been nice. Of course, once the action shifts out of the inn, Seville's comments would have to be not as specific because of her likely ignorance of practically everything.
Nice
Solid premise to start on, intro was lacking in a real attention grabber, but the rest of the story was sound and now I'm interested in where it goes. Good work, I'll be following along.
Interesting premise
I'm looking forward to the remaining chapters. Well done.
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