All Comments on 'Janet's Debt'

I look forward to on this story! Love the buildup to the ownership and the giving into her base desires. , Waiting for more, Thank you!

So good! Thank you!

Thank you for the feed back. Helps inspire me further for more stories. Much appreciated.

If you continue (this was ok) but put in category it belongs, nothing about this says mature

Sure hope there is one covering the "good stuff" and the "play room!"

Just love that this is mature women and enjoying it. I hope there is a sequel.

I'm hooked

At the very least, try to learn the difference between a comma and period. They are not interchangeable. I can't begin to point out all the errors in this - errors that a grown person who has had even minimal education should not make. There are many errors of punctuation, non-sentences and incorrectly formatted sentences, i.e. -

"Slamming into her, her pussy clenches and grasps and suck's at his cock. "

You have her pussy slamming into her and vaginas do not suck or grasp anything. Why is there an apostrophe in sucks? Learn what an apostrophe does. There are lots of very good online editors. I suggest you find one and learn how to write in basic English. Try this:

https://prowritingaid.com/en/Account/Register2?returnUrl=%2Fen%2FAnalysis%2FWebEditor%2FGo

I'm not sure mature is the right category. The grammar in this story isn't your best, but it's far from horrible. The storyline far outweighs any grammar mistakes!! I hope you'll write more because I'd like to follow Beth's journey into submission and her journey with her friend. Very hot so far!!

It is only the tip of the iceberg please keep on going