All Comments on 'Technically We're Estranged Ch. 09'

I loved your story up till now. I knew this is where you were heading with your ending but I'm still disappointed you included Bella in the relationship. Sorry but loved up till now.

Wish there had been a longer wrap up.

Unfortunately I am quite disappointed by the conclusion, no the engagement part for that was awesome. The pacing was too rushed like you just wanted to end and forget it, there is a lot left out and the whole preparation for this moment seems lost. The inclusion of Bella would (and should) be left for some later time as some kind of a treat, now their future marriage just feels cheap and with lot less love than expected.

For this I can't give you more than a 3* but at least they are finally happy together.

that is awesome, hot & nasty, I just loved it, & the best part is that u included Bella at the end, made it even better for me, u even got me barred up (Aussie slang for hard on), now I really need to read the next chapter the wedding. rated it A++

I wish rounds 1, 2, and 3 could have been written up though. As for the complainers, they seem to forget that ultimately this is porn we're reading. Realistic endings have about as much place here as graphic sex in a children's book. Well done.

"I do not know when my next release will be,"

Maybe you don't, but I suspect quite a few of your readers know when their last was.

An excellent story from a vary accomplished author. I consider myself to be fairly articulate, but I know I will never, ever, be able to reach this standard.

Jealous, but very appreciative.

Very nicely done BtB. I'm glad you chose to include Bella. I wish the story had gone maybe a page longer to really allow them to come together as a couple more even sans sex. Though, given their history I guess they really didnt need it. Bella seems to like a bit of dom/sub play, so that could make for an interesting sequel. This is especially true since the mob boss hinted at wanting Bella for himself, maybe a good bit of drama. Thank you for the entertainment. I enjoyed this series more than your other works, though they were good too.

-J

Feet?

Hot and juicy. Bang bang.

You should have left Bella out of the story, or at least not gotten her involved like this. Not sexy, just cheapened the love story, their love. Made it less interesting I thought. Made the characters less interesting.

This has been fucking fantastic. Man I can't wait for your next series!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Yeah, it was hot, but as others have mentioned - adding Bella cheapened the love angle.

...about Bella's menage ruining the story. Pretty obvious things have been leading up to her inclusion - she's been there every step of the way - and I can even see a setup for a comedy of errors where she has to pretend to be Stephan's new bride when family comes to town.

Good conclusion, BTB, enjoyed it muchly. =D

i agree with some of the comments. while Bella was used as a sexual hook in the story she should not have been in a three way with the other two main characters. it totally ruined the love story vibe I was getting from this and other chapters. in truth, I ended up skipping the end of this story because it was such a let down. But all in all, a great set of stories. its sad you ended it so soon.

Wow, what to say? It has been great to finally get to the end of TWE. At the same time, it's a little bittersweet, kind of like the song says, "we hate to see her go but love to watch her leave". I hate that the series has ended, but am I ever glad that i have gotten to read it all, to the very end. I am glad that your life has slowed down enough that you were able to finally finish it. I just can't wait for the next one!!! Thanks a million for a great story!

Feet?

I was looking forward to the three of them eventually getting together ever since the scene where Bella blew Stephan while he watched his cousin and her friend get it on cam. Exactly the ending I was hoping for!

Also, very well written series. I enjoyed your writing style and the descriptions you used. Can't wait to see more from you!

I wasn't sure how you'd wrap this up into a "Happily Ever After" without being totally stupid/unbelievable... And you know what...?

You nailed it...

Amazing...

Of course, NOW I have to get my head around the idea of this whip smart, brave and powerful woman who is addicted to some guy's cock... And well, OK, and probably the rest of him too... (Referring of course to Bella)

Thanks 4 all the hard work that u poured into this! It was an awesome, fun, sexy and even romanic ride. I would change nothing, I look forward to seeing whats next

God I fucking loved it. Thanks for a quick, sexy and fun journey.

This story was Fucking amazing I think I came to it more than once .

I would love to read more when and if you write it .

The best story ever .Bj xo

I Love your ability to weave multiple elements, continuously through each installment. Sadly, the ending wasn't the high note I fantasized it would be, but damned hot nonetheless! That said, I'm still on Team FOF; awaiting the next episode with bated breath! Thanks for the great work!

Q

I gave it 5 stars, but that was only because 10 wasn't an option. I have thoroughly enjoyed this series, and I do look forward to seeing what you will write next. Many thanks for a good read!

A well deserved 5 stars. Really fun, sexy characters, and you had me rooting for all of them! I was glad they got their threesome, and it all worked out in the end.

My only minor quibble, and it's tiny, is that first cousins can legally marry in Australia!

Thanks so much for this really interesting story. I loved every bit of it from beginning to end,, one of the best series I have read.

These characters and the progression of their relationships was something to behold. I look forward to seeing these characters again in a new series about their life after marriage. Thank you for sharing!

That was just great !

Slow build up, but what a great climax in the end - pun intended !

It was enough when you finally got Mel and Stephan together, but adding Bella into the mix as well was genius.

I'm only sorry it had to end, but we'll worth 5 Stars.

Just a brilliant story from start to finish !

I read all nine parts of the story in a single sitting. This is th first story where I ever did that. Wonderful! Great! What an ending!

Hope we'll be treated to some more of Mel, Bella and Stephan in the future, though. 5 Stars for all stories.

Another great story from BreaktheBar, but what else would the story be???

If its not a great story, it wouldn't have been published

GREAT FINISH! Good story, smooth voyeurism, hot scenes and relationship. This is great stuff. You'll forgive me for hating you a little for being such a good writer :-p

The only things I would have done differently would probly not have been as universally enjoyed... I'm an extreme sentimentalist and would have slowed the story down :-(

Keep going! Eagerly awaiting more of FoF if it's come. :-D

An incredible story which really did it for me. You are a damned good storyteller.

Such a great story. There was a chance that the story would go awry when Mel came to Australia, but the twist with Bella at the end was a master stroke.

I so look forward to reading your other work in the future.

Amazing storytelling and an amazing story loved it.

Best one I've ever read! Wow is not good enough.

we usually don't read stories that have chapters but hell, this one left us wanting more. Great from the first word in chapter one till the end.

Thank you BreakTheBar, this is truly one of my favorites.

Absolutely stunning from start to end !

Literally have spent this morning reading all the chapters back to back

Well done ! Was hoping for a happy ending but that surpassed my imagination !

Well done again !

"I do not know when my next release will be,"

You might not, but I would be prepared to wager that a few of your readers know when their last one was.

I haven't commented on any of the previous chapters, but have given each 5*'s, and all were well deserved.

Thank you for an incredible read.

I loved this series! So well written and So Fucking Hot!, Would love to read more about these 3.

That was your best by far ... I’m sad it’s over !! And the crowd goes wild!

Screw the haters, I loved this triad that you developed! I want more from these characters, though you seem to have stopped writing. Give me more!!

Mel should have done a goodbye cam show with Bella and Stephan for her loyal followers. Go out with a bang. Loved the story though. Great writing.

Read this series straight through. I love your storytelling - descriptive and original. I am so glad the conclusion included Bella. The heart of this story is watching. Nothing more sexy than watching your lover give and receive pleasure. It was a happy ending for all. This woman adored it.

This is the second time I've read this, but it was just as good as the first.

Just a shame I can't vote for it a second time as well.

Rapier

Thank you for a great story. I really enjoy your writing. I notice that you have not posted any new stories in quite a while. I hope you will begin posting again as you are one of the good ones. Thanks!

Loved the story but I wasn’t too thrilled with ending. I thought an epilogue was needed at least.

I have the most incredible and beautiful cousin that I have lusted for since our teens. That's why this story was so wonderfully erotic for me. I see that there was a message from the author that he is still around. I hope he finally finishes the other series.

GOOOOOOOD One

You are a terrific story teller. I enjoyed this tale almost as much as FoF ;) Please write for us some more!

Absolutely loved the development of the story. All three main characters were fun to follow. Must enough suspense and the sex was fantastic. Hope you continue this series...

Fabulous story and great development. Keep up the good work. The series got me off numerous times.

Wonderful series. 5 stars throughout!!!

Fantastic series. Would be great to have a follow-up or at least an epilog. TY!

First, quite a few homophones & the word for your female affianced is your fiancée.

The word if it’s a male is fiancé.

I’m amazed that so many people haven’t learned that.

This was a true 5 star story &I enjoyed it immensely.

I didn’t really care for the last chapter, but I realize I’m a bigger fan of exclusivity than most.

Thank you for the time & effort you put into this.

Bill S.

A very good novelette with a great ending.

One thing I notice in many stories is the lack of knowledge about the words fiancé and fianceé.

A man is a fiancé while a female is a fiancée..

Not too hard.

Fun story too.

Bill S.

Totes Hawt un Zexxi series!

11/10 Longboards!!!!!

Well written and fun to read.

Fantastic story. Your best by far in my view. I have read most of them. Will finish the rest now!

Fantastic story, hope you can add to it

Enjoyed from first paragraph to the last paragraph. Great series. Great ending. Everyone is going to get what he/she wants!

Byron B

I wanted to add, as well, that this series was edited as well or better than anything else I have read on Literotica. Many other authors don’t have a great editor or don’t care enough to find one unfortunately.

Kudos!

Excellent series. I hope they continue on together! Thank you!

I know you said you are going to do a non-incest reboot of this story and that this story is done, but can we get a epilogue to read Stephan, Melissa and Bella getting married, Bella told that Stephan and Melissa are cousins, if they tell their family that they are getting married and their reaction, and their life afterwards.

Or like to see more of this series. Love to see you put these three together. Thru this story you can see he loves them both.

Awesome story, perfect ending. Loved that homage to the legendary FootsieTooToe!

Great story. So often on Literotica the descriptions of sex go overboard or are repetitive and boring. Not in this story. One point though: it is legal for 1st cousins to marry in Australia.

Very well written. Enjoyed it immensely.

Was going to make a comment, but won’t l enjoyed the story and the characters too much.

You know that in Australia marrying a 1st Cousin is legal???

It isn’t considered incest. They changed the law quite some time ago in all states.

Scores 5/5

Loved this , it would be great for a catch - up with them .

This is the second or third time I've read this and it's still as good as the first time.

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Although I'm still hoping you make good on your final point to write more about their adventures.

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Please give it some serious thought - and then just do it !

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You write a brilliant story and this theme is too good for you not to continue with it !

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Rapier

I did not expect to finish this story by laughing. Nicely done, great story overall, A+ for the funny finish.

Excellent as always... Typos were very distracting. Fun read.

This was a fabulous fucking story series! Thank you so much for these characters and this great culmination!

So nice. Love and lust make such a heady mix. Thanks for writing this, and thanks for sharing it.

Good story, didn't much care for the ending. Personally I would have preferred either an ending where Bella is completely left out of it and Stephan just lets her down gently, or an additional chapter's worth of content developing it into a full throuple situation. This sort of half measure where Bella is allowed to blow him but has to beg Mel's permission to do more than that with him is too weird for me.

I lost track of it after Dec 2015 and just found this again. So damn good. Thank you so much for finishing it, loved it.

This is one of my favorite series. One I come back to over and over. I remember waiting to read when they were first being written. Also I love all the rest of your series. I'm just about to fully dive into Font after teasing for a while!

Wish you would come back to this.

My only complaint is that it’s over. 5/5 stars.

I really loved how much time was given to the relationships not just the sex. It really helped take the sex to the next level since we had that extra layer of character and care. While I was sad they didn’t start boning the moment they got back to Australia I really liked seeing them do normal stuff together. It makes the rest of it more special.

I’m also extra happy about Bella. Considering how DTF she was in earlier chapters and how much she got off on both parties…. Honestly this ending feels right and I’m happy for all of them.

I think that’s the biggest sign of success here honestly. I’m left feeling happy for having read this. Thanks for writing and thank you for sharing!

A really great story that was well written

You can marry your cousins in most states in the US. But unfortunately not in Texas it a criminal offence. They had no problem marrying in Australia especially he being an Australian citizen. By law in all states, You can marry your first or second cousins even your aunts, the only restriction is you can’t marry your mother or grandmother..

I really enjoyed this. I did notice some parallels between this and OFGirls, but I love that story too

Outstanding finish to an outstanding tale! Thank you very much.