I loved your story up till now. I knew this is where you were heading with your ending but I'm still disappointed you included Bella in the relationship. Sorry but loved up till now.
Unfortunately I am quite disappointed by the conclusion, no the engagement part for that was awesome. The pacing was too rushed like you just wanted to end and forget it, there is a lot left out and the whole preparation for this moment seems lost. The inclusion of Bella would (and should) be left for some later time as some kind of a treat, now their future marriage just feels cheap and with lot less love than expected.
For this I can't give you more than a 3* but at least they are finally happy together.
that is awesome, hot & nasty, I just loved it, & the best part is that u included Bella at the end, made it even better for me, u even got me barred up (Aussie slang for hard on), now I really need to read the next chapter the wedding. rated it A++
I wish rounds 1, 2, and 3 could have been written up though. As for the complainers, they seem to forget that ultimately this is porn we're reading. Realistic endings have about as much place here as graphic sex in a children's book. Well done.
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Anonymous04/29/16
Was It Intentional?
"I do not know when my next release will be,"
Maybe you don't, but I suspect quite a few of your readers know when their last was.
An excellent story from a vary accomplished author. I consider myself to be fairly articulate, but I know I will never, ever, be able to reach this standard.
Very nicely done BtB. I'm glad you chose to include Bella. I wish the story had gone maybe a page longer to really allow them to come together as a couple more even sans sex. Though, given their history I guess they really didnt need it. Bella seems to like a bit of dom/sub play, so that could make for an interesting sequel. This is especially true since the mob boss hinted at wanting Bella for himself, maybe a good bit of drama. Thank you for the entertainment. I enjoyed this series more than your other works, though they were good too.
You should have left Bella out of the story, or at least not gotten her involved like this. Not sexy, just cheapened the love story, their love. Made it less interesting I thought. Made the characters less interesting.
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Anonymous04/30/16
WOW wow oh WOW!!!
This has been fucking fantastic. Man I can't wait for your next series!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Anonymous05/01/16
Trio ruined the love story
Yeah, it was hot, but as others have mentioned - adding Bella cheapened the love angle.
...about Bella's menage ruining the story. Pretty obvious things have been leading up to her inclusion - she's been there every step of the way - and I can even see a setup for a comedy of errors where she has to pretend to be Stephan's new bride when family comes to town.
i agree with some of the comments. while Bella was used as a sexual hook in the story she should not have been in a three way with the other two main characters. it totally ruined the love story vibe I was getting from this and other chapters. in truth, I ended up skipping the end of this story because it was such a let down. But all in all, a great set of stories. its sad you ended it so soon.
Wow, what to say? It has been great to finally get to the end of TWE. At the same time, it's a little bittersweet, kind of like the song says, "we hate to see her go but love to watch her leave". I hate that the series has ended, but am I ever glad that i have gotten to read it all, to the very end. I am glad that your life has slowed down enough that you were able to finally finish it. I just can't wait for the next one!!! Thanks a million for a great story!
I was looking forward to the three of them eventually getting together ever since the scene where Bella blew Stephan while he watched his cousin and her friend get it on cam. Exactly the ending I was hoping for!
Also, very well written series. I enjoyed your writing style and the descriptions you used. Can't wait to see more from you!
I wasn't sure how you'd wrap this up into a "Happily Ever After" without being totally stupid/unbelievable... And you know what...?
You nailed it...
Amazing...
Of course, NOW I have to get my head around the idea of this whip smart, brave and powerful woman who is addicted to some guy's cock... And well, OK, and probably the rest of him too... (Referring of course to Bella)
Thanks 4 all the hard work that u poured into this! It was an awesome, fun, sexy and even romanic ride. I would change nothing, I look forward to seeing whats next
God I fucking loved it. Thanks for a quick, sexy and fun journey.
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Anonymous08/30/16
WOW
This story was Fucking amazing I think I came to it more than once .
I would love to read more when and if you write it .
The best story ever .Bj xo
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Anonymous09/25/16
A short, intense, rapid-fire roller coaster!
I Love your ability to weave multiple elements, continuously through each installment. Sadly, the ending wasn't the high note I fantasized it would be, but damned hot nonetheless! That said, I'm still on Team FOF; awaiting the next episode with bated breath! Thanks for the great work!
I gave it 5 stars, but that was only because 10 wasn't an option. I have thoroughly enjoyed this series, and I do look forward to seeing what you will write next. Many thanks for a good read!
A well deserved 5 stars. Really fun, sexy characters, and you had me rooting for all of them! I was glad they got their threesome, and it all worked out in the end.
My only minor quibble, and it's tiny, is that first cousins can legally marry in Australia!
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Anonymous10/14/16
Sad to see it end , you have an awesome writing style!
Thanks so much for this really interesting story. I loved every bit of it from beginning to end,, one of the best series I have read.
These characters and the progression of their relationships was something to behold. I look forward to seeing these characters again in a new series about their life after marriage. Thank you for sharing!
GREAT FINISH! Good story, smooth voyeurism, hot scenes and relationship. This is great stuff. You'll forgive me for hating you a little for being such a good writer :-p
The only things I would have done differently would probly not have been as universally enjoyed... I'm an extreme sentimentalist and would have slowed the story down :-(
Keep going! Eagerly awaiting more of FoF if it's come. :-D
English
Sorry....
I loved your story up till now. I knew this is where you were heading with your ending but I'm still disappointed you included Bella in the relationship. Sorry but loved up till now.
Enjoyed but...
Wish there had been a longer wrap up.
I was hoping for more
Unfortunately I am quite disappointed by the conclusion, no the engagement part for that was awesome. The pacing was too rushed like you just wanted to end and forget it, there is a lot left out and the whole preparation for this moment seems lost. The inclusion of Bella would (and should) be left for some later time as some kind of a treat, now their future marriage just feels cheap and with lot less love than expected.
For this I can't give you more than a 3* but at least they are finally happy together.
Awesome, hot & nasty
that is awesome, hot & nasty, I just loved it, & the best part is that u included Bella at the end, made it even better for me, u even got me barred up (Aussie slang for hard on), now I really need to read the next chapter the wedding. rated it A++
Loved it
I wish rounds 1, 2, and 3 could have been written up though. As for the complainers, they seem to forget that ultimately this is porn we're reading. Realistic endings have about as much place here as graphic sex in a children's book. Well done.
Was It Intentional?
"I do not know when my next release will be,"
Maybe you don't, but I suspect quite a few of your readers know when their last was.
An excellent story from a vary accomplished author. I consider myself to be fairly articulate, but I know I will never, ever, be able to reach this standard.
Jealous, but very appreciative.
A Fitting Finale
Very nicely done BtB. I'm glad you chose to include Bella. I wish the story had gone maybe a page longer to really allow them to come together as a couple more even sans sex. Though, given their history I guess they really didnt need it. Bella seems to like a bit of dom/sub play, so that could make for an interesting sequel. This is especially true since the mob boss hinted at wanting Bella for himself, maybe a good bit of drama. Thank you for the entertainment. I enjoyed this series more than your other works, though they were good too.
-J
5 stars
Feet?
Hot and juicy. Bang bang.
Less interesting
You should have left Bella out of the story, or at least not gotten her involved like this. Not sexy, just cheapened the love story, their love. Made it less interesting I thought. Made the characters less interesting.
WOW wow oh WOW!!!
This has been fucking fantastic. Man I can't wait for your next series!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Trio ruined the love story
Yeah, it was hot, but as others have mentioned - adding Bella cheapened the love angle.
Disagree with Anonymous...
...about Bella's menage ruining the story. Pretty obvious things have been leading up to her inclusion - she's been there every step of the way - and I can even see a setup for a comedy of errors where she has to pretend to be Stephan's new bride when family comes to town.
Good conclusion, BTB, enjoyed it muchly. =D
Bella Vs Mel
i agree with some of the comments. while Bella was used as a sexual hook in the story she should not have been in a three way with the other two main characters. it totally ruined the love story vibe I was getting from this and other chapters. in truth, I ended up skipping the end of this story because it was such a let down. But all in all, a great set of stories. its sad you ended it so soon.
WOW
Wow, what to say? It has been great to finally get to the end of TWE. At the same time, it's a little bittersweet, kind of like the song says, "we hate to see her go but love to watch her leave". I hate that the series has ended, but am I ever glad that i have gotten to read it all, to the very end. I am glad that your life has slowed down enough that you were able to finally finish it. I just can't wait for the next one!!! Thanks a million for a great story!
Feet?
Loved it!
I was looking forward to the three of them eventually getting together ever since the scene where Bella blew Stephan while he watched his cousin and her friend get it on cam. Exactly the ending I was hoping for!
Also, very well written series. I enjoyed your writing style and the descriptions you used. Can't wait to see more from you!
OK, a couple of chapters back I was worried...
I wasn't sure how you'd wrap this up into a "Happily Ever After" without being totally stupid/unbelievable... And you know what...?
You nailed it...
Amazing...
Of course, NOW I have to get my head around the idea of this whip smart, brave and powerful woman who is addicted to some guy's cock... And well, OK, and probably the rest of him too... (Referring of course to Bella)
U rock!
Thanks 4 all the hard work that u poured into this! It was an awesome, fun, sexy and even romanic ride. I would change nothing, I look forward to seeing whats next
Feet? Feet.
God I fucking loved it. Thanks for a quick, sexy and fun journey.
WOW
This story was Fucking amazing I think I came to it more than once .
I would love to read more when and if you write it .
The best story ever .Bj xo
A short, intense, rapid-fire roller coaster!
I Love your ability to weave multiple elements, continuously through each installment. Sadly, the ending wasn't the high note I fantasized it would be, but damned hot nonetheless! That said, I'm still on Team FOF; awaiting the next episode with bated breath! Thanks for the great work!
Q
Most Excellent!
I gave it 5 stars, but that was only because 10 wasn't an option. I have thoroughly enjoyed this series, and I do look forward to seeing what you will write next. Many thanks for a good read!
What a great story!
A well deserved 5 stars. Really fun, sexy characters, and you had me rooting for all of them! I was glad they got their threesome, and it all worked out in the end.
My only minor quibble, and it's tiny, is that first cousins can legally marry in Australia!
Sad to see it end , you have an awesome writing style!
Thanks so much for this really interesting story. I loved every bit of it from beginning to end,, one of the best series I have read.
Loved it
These characters and the progression of their relationships was something to behold. I look forward to seeing these characters again in a new series about their life after marriage. Thank you for sharing!
Wow !
That was just great !
Slow build up, but what a great climax in the end - pun intended !
It was enough when you finally got Mel and Stephan together, but adding Bella into the mix as well was genius.
I'm only sorry it had to end, but we'll worth 5 Stars.
Just a brilliant story from start to finish !
WOW!!!
I read all nine parts of the story in a single sitting. This is th first story where I ever did that. Wonderful! Great! What an ending!
Hope we'll be treated to some more of Mel, Bella and Stephan in the future, though. 5 Stars for all stories.
Wow
Another great story from BreaktheBar, but what else would the story be???
If its not a great story, it wouldn't have been published
WOW
GREAT FINISH! Good story, smooth voyeurism, hot scenes and relationship. This is great stuff. You'll forgive me for hating you a little for being such a good writer :-p
The only things I would have done differently would probly not have been as universally enjoyed... I'm an extreme sentimentalist and would have slowed the story down :-(
Keep going! Eagerly awaiting more of FoF if it's come. :-D
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