Shared After Wedding

A Small Suggestion

By all means write a stroke story but do us a favour and leave out the "love". You don't understand the meaning of the word.

Fantastic short story.

Hope to see more stories from you in the future. Please don't allow the Cuck near the other man's cock in the future. 5*

Hey annony you retard, wtf is a sand niggger>?

gave this a 5!!

I liked it a lot!!!!!

Great job! Write more.

WELCOME!

This seems to be your first effort for Literotica, but since you say you’ve written other erotic novels, you aren’t new to the game. I think this is a well written short story that deserves a 5 for the writing aspect, however I can’t get too excited by authors who go the humiliation route. Okay, so many men have small cocks, some have big ones that won’t work, and others have other problems. No one deserves to be humiliated by their spouse and to be truthful, reading about it will turn a lot of readers off. I am one of those readers, and when you decided to go that route my score dropped to a 1, HOWEVER that is based on my preface and would not be fair. Since the way the story is written and the story itself are both important I gave you a 3.

Don’t stop writing, you are good!

Loved it, feel bad for John, But....

Stories like this make me really hot and bothered. Thanks xoxoxoxo Annette

Well written and interesting

I liked the story and how quickly it developed. It could as easily be developed into something longer and with more interpersonal details.
I suspect that some of your detractors were off put by the subject matter more than by the story line and style.
Thanks for your effort.

well

You said Ted had only cum once before cumming in you, but earlier you saw his cum draining from his wife and you had also sucked him off. What gives?

Good story but the humiliation aspect is a real turnoff. 2

My wife

I'm not into the humiliation aspect of this story but everything else was pretty hot. My wife and I need to invite Ted over to our place. Want him to fuck my wife's brains out.

A bit too

ruthlessly humiliating for poor old John for my liking. If humiliation was part of their game then presumably he wouldn't be crying -- which he was. Perhaps he should have simply walked out?

agree

I agree with screwher. Also like your bio.

5

Same old cocksucker annony and his retarded comments. Hope this (5 F I V E annony) helps the score.

Tell me something

When your characters are saying, "OMG..." are you envisioning them verbalizing, "OMG!" like some some junior high-school girl, or do you hear them saying, "Oh, my God" as you write it?

I read it as if a fourteen year old airhead is OMGing, and is verbalizing an abbreviation. I liked the story, but please don't get sloppy (or is it lazy?) with things that distract readers from your work. Thanks.

I've read a few of these 'stories', is it just me or do they ALL come across like a 12 year old has written them? Childish writing and I have a hard time accepting an adult being the way they are portrayed in a very immature way in SS stories.

Tiny cock

My husband has a tiny cock too and I'd only ever had sex with him until my 40th birthday when one of his friends hit on me. I was a little drunk and we fucked now I fuck him when ever I can.
Jill

1*

Another illiterate WHORE posting cuck shit.