Not bad for concept, but really needs help for proofreading and grammar. Also need more detail and better descriptions of characters to enable reader to visualize them. You, as an author, are supposed to paint a picture for the reader.
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Anonymous05/03/16
Why not the real son instead of STEP SON?
This does not belong in incest/taboo genre.
The taboo factor of Incest is the risk of potential genetic problems with any offspring resulting from the union of blood relations.
Sex with the step son is not incest and is certainly NOT taboo.
WAIT!! Are proof readers supposed to fix sentence structure? Entire sentences don't even make sense. Slow down, re-read, re-read again, re-re-read, then and only then, have two or more people proof read it, re-read it, and then maybe submit it. I'm just sayin.
English
Nice
Like where this is going !
Way too many grammatical errors for me to continue reading past the first chapter.
A re-write is in order after using someone to proofread and spell-check utilized.
Sorry, only warrants two stars and that for the story concept.
Please - Find a Proofreader and/or Editor
Not bad for concept, but really needs help for proofreading and grammar. Also need more detail and better descriptions of characters to enable reader to visualize them. You, as an author, are supposed to paint a picture for the reader.
Why not the real son instead of STEP SON?
This does not belong in incest/taboo genre.
The taboo factor of Incest is the risk of potential genetic problems with any offspring resulting from the union of blood relations.
Sex with the step son is not incest and is certainly NOT taboo.
Proof Reader, or Ghost Writer?
WAIT!! Are proof readers supposed to fix sentence structure? Entire sentences don't even make sense. Slow down, re-read, re-read again, re-re-read, then and only then, have two or more people proof read it, re-read it, and then maybe submit it. I'm just sayin.
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