The New Wolf Ch. 01

Looking forward to the next chapter.

So very glad to read a story that is romance driven. I'm loving the dialogue and humor you convey. Thanks for this story!

I loved it

Can't wait to read the next chapter.

ooh

A very promising story! Am I seeing what I think I'm seeing - she will turn out to be Lucas' mate? That would be so cool!

I feel bad for Suzy... :(

Hmmm

First impression. Alpha is a rapist and a liar. Beta is almost as bad. Hope I'm wrong.

Good start to this

But she seems to be taking things too well, and for a pack they aren't as close as you'd want.

Great start

The Alpha went from Good to Bloody Awful on page 3. Clearly using Suzy and drugged Clara. Not that much free will or trust after all. Guessing Lucas and Clara will be mates. Can't wait to see how they interact. Have a feeling it will be explosive… in a bad way.

Be careful

As some of the anonymous comments have stated the attitude this story is taking isn't something everyone might like. Could be a great story.

Looking forward to the next chapter

Love this chapter, looking forward to see how it all pans out

more

already hooked

More please

Already love it, can't wait for an update :)

Good start. Weird pacing though.

The turning, introduction to the pack, introduction of new characters, Lucas' return and the curveball that he is strong enough to be alpha and will split off soon just flew by. I would have liked to sink into the details a bit more and get to know Clara. You spent time describing Lucas but I still have no idea what Clara looks like, other than blonde and pretty.

I like that she is strong and intelligent. The guys seem like jerks, James included, so I hope she gives them a run for their money. Obvious that she and Lucas will be mates but I'm looking forward to the fireworks.

I'm also excited to see a complete story and hope you will be able to post quickly. All my comments are meant to be constructive for your edits.

I don't get the free will shit

Why tell the new kid that lie and then immediately admit you lied and that they can't do anything they want, such as go back to their dream job or see friends ever again. Not a trust builder, but I suppose that will be taken care of by a coincidental life saving, plenty of magic dick and enforced servitude courtesy of the magic word MINE being growled just so, right?

Here's hoping you buck the idiot stereotypes and bring us a new and better story.

more please I love it...

I love your stories more please

Can you tell us how many chapters there will be? With you stating one a week posting for a story that is done, I'll wait til the last chapter is up to start reading.

Great start, love it already!

Yay! Im so glad to see another story from you, can't wait to continue reading! Contrary to a comment below, I enjoyed the pacing and everything seemed to make perfect sense. Your characters could use a few more layers of personality, but that will come in due time.

I'm so excited for Clara and Lucas to meet, I think I know what smells so good in the "kitchen." ;)

Yes! Turn the cliche's on their asses.

I enjoyed this very much. It drives me crazy how there are so many unwritten rules about how werewolf packs are supposed to be. As if someone wrote the rules and by breaking the to tell of a different pack/pack structure is to blaspheme.

This alpha is multi dementional and sees nothing wrong with doing a little bad in order to.accomplish what he considers the greater good. The blow job at the end gave him a bit of a cavalier attitude about sex. Suzy, I think that was her name, seemed fine with giving an not getting and the alpha clearly had no problem with it either. So either Suzy is floozy or the alpha is kind of dickish.

I am very eager to read more so I hope you continue this!

Love this

Can't wait to read more :)

A different take

I was impressed that your storyline had such a different twist on the accepted were cannon. A forced turning didn't make the victim go insane. The Alpha seemed to be very biased about who he considered deserving of special treatment. He also didn't want his pack to mingle with any humans and seemed to think a human turned were was a lesser pack member just because she was turned.
The beta seemed to have the same hangups along with just being a douchebag to other wares in his pack as if all but the alpha and Roxy were beneath him.
The first members the alpha introduces Clara to are bimbos and remind me of girls in IS ...spoiled and indifferent to anyone else.
I don't blame Clara for wanting to get as far away from them as possible. Even Suzy seems a bit subservient. Here is This girl who just joins the pack and one of the first things they do is drug her.
What a toxic group to fall in with.
Can't wait to see what happens to this new wolf and this pack.
Well done.