Sister I Didn't Know I Had

This is a story site, not 'Dear Abby'

Tell it to the Daily Mail, no-one here cares about your true-life agonizing over your sister in a bikini. Grow up.

Code Red!!!

Story is terminal.

A good start

It would help if the individual chapters were a lot longer. The people who don't like the story will move on...don't worry about their criticism.

Good start

Like others have said let the self proclaimed literary critics go by the wayside. Spend a little more time on your punctuation and leave out the irrelevant, like I won't tell you their names because it doesn't matter, adds nothing to your story. As you write more you'll get better at it.

Great story don't listen to the haters.

re:Great story don't listen to the haters.

hater: person who slams others for daring to have a different opinion, For example, see bripash33.

"I will keep updating these as everything develops."

Please don't, at least not until you're older. I have a feeling that you're not old enough to be here.

Keep writing

I like your story I hope you keep writing and let us know what is going on. Please ignore the negative things that people comment

A good read

Please do keep on with the story. It is really nice to read a story that has the correct use of grammar and spelling, makes a really nice change. The story line is way different to what is normally presented here.
Good read please continue.

Handyman2

Yes, we need to have you keep going, this story is very good and while it's tame now; I feel it's about to get hotter !! Hopefully, they will explore their sexual feelings and he will get naked for her and maybe she'll go further. Cannot wait for the next chapter. Thanks.

Needless to say....

"Needless to say as my sister I wanted to know her."
"Needless to say I was very nervous."
"Needless to say the smile on my face was massive."

If something is truly needless to say, then don't say it. If something needs to be included, then just include it.

You need to be careful about overusing a word, cliche, or phrase. Needless to say, a good editor will help you catch things like this. (Sorry, I couldn't resist!)

Reality

Going thru the real thing in my life, same circumstances.