There is some potential here. I liked the twist at the end, about how it all being a dream. However, identical twins cannot be of the opposite sex. That hurts your credibility.
this idea can be saved if the author writes that they were born identical and one of them had a sex change operation!!! LOL keep writing
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Anonymous03/20/05
review
great story
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Anonymous05/31/07
im horny
im so horny and need a good fucking
i have a nice tight pussy and double d's
if any one wants to fuck me just look at the end of 25th street in newyork.
only $5 per hour and i do any thing you want
before you fo there, put a message here
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Anonymous08/03/08
twins?
how are u identical twins he is a man you r a woman??? think about all of your story not just the best part( the sex) other then that it was pretty good.
Damn, quit busting her chops for a simple mistake!
I thought the story was pretty damned HOT myself... Yes, she made one simple mistake... They can't be "Identical" Twins... But, they damned sure can be TWINS... I would like to see ChickenLicken write another story... I would like it if it were a little bit longer also, fill in a little bit more... But, other than that, I think she did one hell of a job for her first attempt at writing a story... Tis not the easiest thing to do, to sit down and put your words into a story, and have it come out the way that you want it to read... I know, I've tried myself, and it wasn't pretty... LOL's... So, to Chicken Licken... Please continue... I thought that it was pretty damned good myself...
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Anonymous08/17/11
stopped reading
i stopped at the 10x4 cock what is wrong with these asses use normal sizes.
total waste of space and time
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Anonymous01/19/12
Fake cock size ruined the story all together. Next time use normal size.
English
I liked it
Fine, amusing, hot story. Continue. Love and kisses.
Keep writing
God shot for a first story. Keep at it and they will only get better.
Keep writing
Very good, I hope to read more of your stories soon.
Needs work
There is some potential here. I liked the twist at the end, about how it all being a dream. However, identical twins cannot be of the opposite sex. That hurts your credibility.
identical twins
this idea can be saved if the author writes that they were born identical and one of them had a sex change operation!!! LOL keep writing
review
great story
im horny
im so horny and need a good fucking
i have a nice tight pussy and double d's
if any one wants to fuck me just look at the end of 25th street in newyork.
only $5 per hour and i do any thing you want
before you fo there, put a message here
twins?
how are u identical twins he is a man you r a woman??? think about all of your story not just the best part( the sex) other then that it was pretty good.
Damn, quit busting her chops for a simple mistake!
I thought the story was pretty damned HOT myself... Yes, she made one simple mistake... They can't be "Identical" Twins... But, they damned sure can be TWINS... I would like to see ChickenLicken write another story... I would like it if it were a little bit longer also, fill in a little bit more... But, other than that, I think she did one hell of a job for her first attempt at writing a story... Tis not the easiest thing to do, to sit down and put your words into a story, and have it come out the way that you want it to read... I know, I've tried myself, and it wasn't pretty... LOL's... So, to Chicken Licken... Please continue... I thought that it was pretty damned good myself...
stopped reading
i stopped at the 10x4 cock what is wrong with these asses use normal sizes.
total waste of space and time
Fake cock size ruined the story all together. Next time use normal size.
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