This expression should have led straight into a 69 position. This story felt rushed, not at all bad, but definitely rushed. In keeping with a rushed story you could easily have ended it there with a 69 position, paving the way for sex on a future date. The buildup was good but I was disappointed at this point in the story. So much more could have been done had you just showed some patience.
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Anonymous05/20/16
Good build up, mediocre climax.
It seemed... rushed. Focus on the journey not the destination with a story like this. Allow the characters to feel a little reluctance or hesitance or uncertainty.
English
"First to cum"
This expression should have led straight into a 69 position. This story felt rushed, not at all bad, but definitely rushed. In keeping with a rushed story you could easily have ended it there with a 69 position, paving the way for sex on a future date. The buildup was good but I was disappointed at this point in the story. So much more could have been done had you just showed some patience.
Good build up, mediocre climax.
It seemed... rushed. Focus on the journey not the destination with a story like this. Allow the characters to feel a little reluctance or hesitance or uncertainty.
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