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by Hemityte05/14/16

"First to cum"

This expression should have led straight into a 69 position. This story felt rushed, not at all bad, but definitely rushed. In keeping with a rushed story you could easily have ended it there with a 69 position, paving the way for sex on a future date. The buildup was good but I was disappointed at this point in the story. So much more could have been done had you just showed some patience.

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by Anonymous05/20/16

Good build up, mediocre climax.

It seemed... rushed. Focus on the journey not the destination with a story like this. Allow the characters to feel a little reluctance or hesitance or uncertainty.

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