Well written!!! I ABSOLUTELY loved reading this and wondering or wishing for such a brother-in-law..Crap being an only kid!! :( Well done..)
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Anonymous05/14/16
Pumpin
Well, you've got my heart a pumpin' for sure. Very well written. Nice flow to this believable story. Good job.
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Anonymous05/16/16
What??
James and Madison been together since they could walk and sooo in love? But she has baby by another and is happy about divorce. Story needs more information or it don't fit together.
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Anonymous05/16/16
While the sex scene was hot, the story was not. If you're going to make statements...
...lab out how in love and committed a couple are, you can't cop out after the news comes out with crap like, "...but she was OK. Come to find out, one of her children wasn't exactly James'. She'd been looking for a way...."
That makes most of the early paragraphs total baloney and the rest of it fail as a story. You have to keep engaging your audience in a way that keeps your story believable. You cheated.
Good enough for me and my Nephew to read together with his his big cock sending streams of cum into my pussy. Keeeep Fuuucking Meeeee!!!! Cum in Againnnn OMGOMGOMG YESSSSSSSSSSSS! CUMMMMMMINGGGG! FILLLLL MMEEEEE!!!!
TBC
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WOWEEE
Well written!!! I ABSOLUTELY loved reading this and wondering or wishing for such a brother-in-law..Crap being an only kid!! :( Well done..)
Pumpin
Well, you've got my heart a pumpin' for sure. Very well written. Nice flow to this believable story. Good job.
What??
James and Madison been together since they could walk and sooo in love? But she has baby by another and is happy about divorce. Story needs more information or it don't fit together.
While the sex scene was hot, the story was not. If you're going to make statements...
...lab out how in love and committed a couple are, you can't cop out after the news comes out with crap like, "...but she was OK. Come to find out, one of her children wasn't exactly James'. She'd been looking for a way...."
That makes most of the early paragraphs total baloney and the rest of it fail as a story. You have to keep engaging your audience in a way that keeps your story believable. You cheated.
Yesss
Good enough for me and my Nephew to read together with his his big cock sending streams of cum into my pussy. Keeeep Fuuucking Meeeee!!!! Cum in Againnnn OMGOMGOMG YESSSSSSSSSSSS! CUMMMMMMINGGGG! FILLLLL MMEEEEE!!!!
TBC
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