finally! I was waiting for the second one.
ok some suggestions.
1. when it was the dad's pov you have to say "my wife's husband Paul" or something you can't say uncle.
2. where is Kate going? This may seem irrelevant, but not to me.
3. you need some thing that goes back to your title. like the dad is at the doorway.
good stuff waiting for the next!
English
Satisfying indeed!
Amazing stories. Thank you!
absolutely perfect story. cant help imagine myself there
YES
finally! I was waiting for the second one.
ok some suggestions.
1. when it was the dad's pov you have to say "my wife's husband Paul" or something you can't say uncle.
2. where is Kate going? This may seem irrelevant, but not to me.
3. you need some thing that goes back to your title. like the dad is at the doorway.
good stuff waiting for the next!
nice follow up
well done
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