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Not romance, belongs in erotic couplings
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Not romance is right and not much eroticism either. Needs work, lots of work on several levels. Don't mean to be unkind but we call 'um as we see 'um. But if the passion calls, keep writing. Writing is a craft as the experts say. Practice doesn't make perfect, though it does make better. Hang in there.
Not romance, this is whats wrong with LIT, the admins gave up on their own guidelines and lets writers post what they want where they want and wonder why there are so many negative comments. 1* purely because this is not romantic in the least, its an erotic couplings story.
It !!!
It is not romance. It has the makings of a good stroke story, but you just need to finish it !!!
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