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i love it
i know what you mean about waiting for the words.
your poem captures that anxiety and perhaps a bit of the resentment we feel at having become so dependent
really a great piece of writing
thank you
Very nice.
Very good over all, but this part was just brilliant:
My brain is quiet
and for a second
I know other people.
They live without
others in their head,
just like this.
There's nothing wrong with the rest, but had you ended it right there, it would had gotten a 5 out of me.
I think it was
the title that threw off the poem...Empty Morning, but then in the poem you say "days pass away..."
then the last stanza says "Then it comes,
that day his thoughts
turn back to me. "
Is this the reflection of an Empty Morning? This confused me a bit. As Liar said...excellent two verses where you could have ended the poem right there and it go excellent with your title.
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