More than Siblings Ch. 01

Where's the story? Sure the action, or at least the start of it, is here but how did ti get there?

Nice !

Can't wait for more !

What movie did they watch?

Autocorrect is a terrible thing.

Turn it off. Matey should be Maybe. All in all a good story

Wonderful!!!!!

Good start. Keep it going.

suggestions

Good idea, but try re doing this with more build up and background. this little bit could be turned into 3 pages alone.

Brother-Sister Love

I hope she gives him the blow-job of his life and then fuck for two hours straight! Two consenting adults, enjoying each other's bodies -- as they were meant to do.

Do you think there wasn't incest in the Garden of Eden? If not, how did the human race begin?

Just getting started and it stopped! How about a whole chapter next time and not something the size of a paragraph.

Great!

I hope he inserts a toothpick in her bunghole while she takes his plump cockhead up one of her mutated nostrils.

Dont bother with chapter 2 !!!

Bad spelling.... bad grammar and a storyline a 12 yr old kid would write. Take up golf or fishing as literotica def. isn't your thing !!

my pov

just wish that you and a lot of other authors would not be in such a rush to get to the intimate parts of the story. a quiet build-up would be so much more appreciated.
I am curious how you could slow this story given the start that it has. good premis.
interesting follow-up?

I'm in

You have my attention. I really want to read where this goes.

Write, NOW!

My title said it. Write don't read, let the sister speak.
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