Complete utter rubbish !
Happy swingers living happily ever after ?
In the first few chapters I had thought that ... maybe just maybe you were actually going to expand yourself and write something remotely realistic about real people in plausible circumstances because you had the premise set up to do that.
But sadly no ... You just drove it towards the same happy swingers crap with a touch of incest you usually write with wall to wall badly written sex scenes that tend to bond into each other with their inherent blandness and always with accompanying nauseating justifications that are not even remotely believable which at least makes them consistent with your ridiculous characters.
It was just a mirror of everything else you have written recently with the names changed.
You not a poor writer structurally so I find it quite interesting that you are unable to expand your narratives into more realistic and plausible storylines and characters. Why don't you try to actually use your imagination and actually write a narrative that is slightly more believeable then this awful science(less) fiction.
You might as well be on Mars ....
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Anonymous05/22/16
Aoparently the doc likes rubbish..
For "rubbish" I thought this pretty well done.
I do agree finding a community like would be few and far between but a planned community is not far fetched.
Research (2106) indicates that three to five percent of U.S. households involve some kind of plural or polyamorous living. That would put the number around three to five million. My wife and I have lived this way in the past, but don't happen to right now. I have several close friends who live in such arrangements. None of us are druggies, motorcycle gang members, or what some might call white trash; we are high earning professionals that include several MDs, PhDs, and others who have realized that there are other relationships beside a monogamous marriage. Many of us are religious, and certainly spiritual in our thinking. We are inclusive. Regardless of the troll comments, many people have made a Paradigm Shift to a new way of living. Is it better? Not necessarily; it's just different, and should be tolerated just the way people in this way of life tolerate monogamy or exclusivity in others. // SW
SteveWallace, you may be the greatest author of erotica of the 21st Century - and perhaps of all time. Your stories (including this one) have good character development, interesting and loving characters, GREAT sex scenes, and very few of the annoying there/their/they're category of grammatical errors. There are a few - VERY few - typos, fewer than I would normally make myself. (Either that, or you have a great editor. Perhaps both.)
I especially like that none of your stories appear to be focused on possession, jealousy, or revenge. Sex is supposed to be fun; too many sex stories are downers, and yours never are.
Thank you, and keep up the GREAT work!
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Anonymous12/03/16
Come on ....
Dr., if you want real life, write your own story. As far as erotic fiction is concerned, your negative response indicates you are a literary snob who cannot produce anything close to what is written here. I challenge you to put your keyboard where your mouth is.
English
This was ...
Complete utter rubbish !
Happy swingers living happily ever after ?
In the first few chapters I had thought that ... maybe just maybe you were actually going to expand yourself and write something remotely realistic about real people in plausible circumstances because you had the premise set up to do that.
But sadly no ... You just drove it towards the same happy swingers crap with a touch of incest you usually write with wall to wall badly written sex scenes that tend to bond into each other with their inherent blandness and always with accompanying nauseating justifications that are not even remotely believable which at least makes them consistent with your ridiculous characters.
It was just a mirror of everything else you have written recently with the names changed.
You not a poor writer structurally so I find it quite interesting that you are unable to expand your narratives into more realistic and plausible storylines and characters. Why don't you try to actually use your imagination and actually write a narrative that is slightly more believeable then this awful science(less) fiction.
You might as well be on Mars ....
Aoparently the doc likes rubbish..
For "rubbish" I thought this pretty well done.
I do agree finding a community like would be few and far between but a planned community is not far fetched.
I look forward to a followon story.
Reality Check
Research (2106) indicates that three to five percent of U.S. households involve some kind of plural or polyamorous living. That would put the number around three to five million. My wife and I have lived this way in the past, but don't happen to right now. I have several close friends who live in such arrangements. None of us are druggies, motorcycle gang members, or what some might call white trash; we are high earning professionals that include several MDs, PhDs, and others who have realized that there are other relationships beside a monogamous marriage. Many of us are religious, and certainly spiritual in our thinking. We are inclusive. Regardless of the troll comments, many people have made a Paradigm Shift to a new way of living. Is it better? Not necessarily; it's just different, and should be tolerated just the way people in this way of life tolerate monogamy or exclusivity in others. // SW
Random thought...
Who's the daddys? The is my biggest problem with this end.
Outstanding As Always
SteveWallace, you may be the greatest author of erotica of the 21st Century - and perhaps of all time. Your stories (including this one) have good character development, interesting and loving characters, GREAT sex scenes, and very few of the annoying there/their/they're category of grammatical errors. There are a few - VERY few - typos, fewer than I would normally make myself. (Either that, or you have a great editor. Perhaps both.)
I especially like that none of your stories appear to be focused on possession, jealousy, or revenge. Sex is supposed to be fun; too many sex stories are downers, and yours never are.
Thank you, and keep up the GREAT work!
Come on ....
Dr., if you want real life, write your own story. As far as erotic fiction is concerned, your negative response indicates you are a literary snob who cannot produce anything close to what is written here. I challenge you to put your keyboard where your mouth is.
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