If This Is Your First I Hope It Won't Be Your Last!
Well done. It hooked me from beginning to end. One suggestion, as a non-writer myself: I didn't feel the story was told as much from a female perspective as from a male's. That did not detract from the story, by the way. I really enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing. Mike
Is it physically possible for a woman to take both of a man's testes in her mouth? (Assuming that they are being taken together and remain within his scrotum.)
It seems to me that would require a very large mouth or very small testicles. (But then, my experience is very limited.)
I don't really care about subject and never intended to be the moral compass on this site. As far as I'm concerned, anything goes [except incest and beastiality, not my cup of tea] and generally don't begrudge anyone's turn ons.
So this is not criticism on the subject you chose but poor writing. No character development, background. Everything is rushed.
It's not a total disaster though. Dialogue is ok without being quality, but you can build on that when you write your next story.
This might appeal to those who want "stroke" story and that's probably what it is. However that's not what I personally look for here.
2* from me.
Only yours. No one else's. And I only delete yours because you always give a 1 vote. I rely to most comments when the writer is brave and manly enough to give their names. Not like your old ugly fag asshole who is fucking coward. 5555555 So eat shit you sad example of not only a man but a human being!
English
Hello lovely readers!
Constructive criticism, to help me write better please, or positive compliments. Hater comments will go in the trash where they belong.
Cute and entertaining
I really liked it! 5*
If This Is Your First I Hope It Won't Be Your Last!
Well done. It hooked me from beginning to end. One suggestion, as a non-writer myself: I didn't feel the story was told as much from a female perspective as from a male's. That did not detract from the story, by the way. I really enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing. Mike
A question of anatomy
Is it physically possible for a woman to take both of a man's testes in her mouth? (Assuming that they are being taken together and remain within his scrotum.)
It seems to me that would require a very large mouth or very small testicles. (But then, my experience is very limited.)
Lue
Pretty poor
I don't really care about subject and never intended to be the moral compass on this site. As far as I'm concerned, anything goes [except incest and beastiality, not my cup of tea] and generally don't begrudge anyone's turn ons.
So this is not criticism on the subject you chose but poor writing. No character development, background. Everything is rushed.
It's not a total disaster though. Dialogue is ok without being quality, but you can build on that when you write your next story.
This might appeal to those who want "stroke" story and that's probably what it is. However that's not what I personally look for here.
2* from me.
5
to offset the asshole of LIT"s 1 vote, eat annony eat shit and die
Bonnie is my raal name asshole. 5 to offset the asshole of LIT"s 1 vote, eat annony eat shit and die
so go suck some cock like you do every day
And mye mailis real to ass wipe. So I give a 5 to the
writer to offset your sad littl3e fag ass 1.
5
to help the score. Dumbass annony you have been offset again. I know the score won't change but your fucking comment is offset
I only delete your comments asshloe of LIT!
Only yours. No one else's. And I only delete yours because you always give a 1 vote. I rely to most comments when the writer is brave and manly enough to give their names. Not like your old ugly fag asshole who is fucking coward. 5555555 So eat shit you sad example of not only a man but a human being!
Stories
You are a very talented writer thanks for sharing your adventures
1*
Another illiterate WHORE posting cuck shit.
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