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Ah.
Lovely wistful poem. DM, you have good taste in all things - wine, art, furnishings - and women?
last stanza
Don't you think that you change the direction of the poem and weaken it with the last stanza? It starts out so strong and clear and at the end it seems to muddle into sarcasm and put down.
muddle
the damn ashtray sentiment at the end was to me the redeeming part of the poem. I felt there was too much of the what good taste name dropping and that I got it I got it she knows which fork to use already... get to the point of it all more quickly.
I now hestitate
to invite you over for dinner, my friend. :) On the other hand, there's no Lalique here. And the poem is tasteful and wry--well done so that the AB rhyme scheme, which could make the poem plod, is quite unobtrusive. Very tongue in cheek with a sneaky depth of understanding, fonce.
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Is it Lake Erie you speak of? I've heard of that unusual weather event, like seeing over the horizon; tales I heard put the event at about a half hour.
Otherwise, you paint quite a picture of the lady carrying on so.
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This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 34,000 poems.
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Making do.
A poor little rich girl ~ getting by the best way she can on her husband's riches.
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