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Games Among Friends

byEdwardianFantasy©
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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous05/28/16

Sexy

But I couldn't tell them apart. When they got to the pool, I learned Alexa was tiny and horny.

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by Anonymous05/28/16

Goodish

It was a fine story, but I had no clue about who was who.

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by Anonymous05/28/16

It was a great story. Although, like the other comments said, it was a little hard to tell people apart. I'd suggest giving each character a very prominent feature.that you go into great detail about.

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by EdwardianFantasy05/28/16

Thanks!

Thanks for the input! To be honest, I got a bit confused myself a few times when I was writing it. I wanted to put a concerted effort into not starting off each character with a description, and rather to let their description build throughout the story. Partly so that its more fluid, but also so that each reader can picture the character more uniquely, but I kind of missed the mark, and I shouldn't have done it with so many characters.

Improvements to be made on the next story! :D

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by Anonymous05/29/16

Sounds good!

I was one of the other anon comments as well. Your comment makes me certain your next story will be an exelent one :)

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by maddict07/15/16

A Hard one for me to

I like this like it is, who's who with who a nice mix of bodies. Thanks Peter glad I wasn't the first hard on. Luv the girls, every try to play girls reversed chicken?

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by Anonymous12/06/16

Proof reading...

" "Ok, thats me to, so who gives me a dare?" Questioned Peter "
("that's me TOO")

"I'm game if your game...."
("YOU'RE")

"across the pool, Lauren poured the vodka into James's mouth..."
("Across the pool...")

There's others too.

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