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Acid Dreams

byMr. Chuckles©
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by Anonymous

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by dreamsweet03/27/04

so-so

each line had a theme that could be expanded, but this came out as something like a pop song, because it was too general, and I see a lot of cliches. Maybe take each one of the themes and give us something to focus on. It seems to have been done just for the sake of rhymes, and perhaps too much focus went into those rhymes.

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by LeBroz12/17/06

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Meter & rhyme with shallow content.

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by duddle14601/16/07

exquisite

One line made it all worth while for me ~ "Butterfly dreams and caterpillar wishes.

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