48 Hours on Blue Bayou Pt. 24: Julie

"Master has no need or interest to be cruel to slaves" five minutes later she gets punished for her grovelling thanks to a guard.

The prose is solid but the content just seems mean spirited. The protagonist acts like her master is some sort of benevolent overlord but all he does is beat and mistreat her blaming her for everything. When compared to your earlier works in this series it's very jarring with less well trained girls being much better treat and recieving happy endings to their stories, when it comes to Julie I hope you can recapture that careful balance of a less mean spirited non-con story.

Anon: Thanks for your

comment. It's very important for an author to receive constructive criticism. When I wrote Pt. 1 in 2014, I intended for each character to embark on a different journey. I started writing for Autumn and Lisa and took on co-author J Spe to write Julie's tale. We have different styles and ideas, and of course different fans and critics. We receive detailed private messages from men and women about their secret fantasies and about story suggestions. Thanks for taking the time to read the story and offering your comments.

Thank you for your reply

As the title to the comment says thank you for your reply (one of these days I'll finally get around to making an account), knowning some of what's going on in the background really does help to better understand how the story has shaped as it has.

Like I said previously the prose is very solid, it flows well and is easy to read. I think what issues arise are more tonal issues when compared to earlier sections of the story. That being said take it as a compliment to your skill in character writing that people become so attached to your characters that they become defensive of them :)

Up and down - 3rd comment

Your stories are well written and I'm always waiting for your new parts, but this story has taken a too sad turn and always shows less sex, bdsm or other non-consensual action ...
I hope you know where you are driving the story and will find a less sad and more appropriate way out. After all, if they understand more and more what she's worth, why they persist in wanting to sell her?

Fantastic journey

Sex can be nice to read but what goes on in Julie's head is a hundred times more interesting. And it is narrated well. Fantastic journey of slavery!

Up and down - P.s.

p.s.
It has been stated more and more time that in this Enterprise: "After her correction,... as if she had never committed her crime. That is, she will have a clean slate and nobody will refer to her crime again."
This is clearly not true with Julie!
How it is?

True-- Too Sad a Turn

I agree with "Up and Down, 3rd Comment." This story is fantastic and extremely well written for two people that are supposed to be amateurs. True, we all make mistakes, however little, that change our lives forever but Julie's small crime, in my humble opinion, warranted nothing more than the equivalent to probation.

This story has taken a very sad turn and, even after taking a deep breath as Julie does to organize her answer, I cannot think of anything else to say other than this story, regardless of outcome, will remain on my favorites list.

Well done girls. Oh-- Attaboy!!