but it was well written. More buildup and details would help hold the reader's interest.
I notice that you have written other stories, so I'll read them also.
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Anonymous06/08/16
I agree.
I agree with grayge37. It is well written but brief, I would have preferred a slower build up and possibly 3 or 4 chapters. Having sid that I did enjoy the story.
...but I barely have time to write as is - so, for better or for worse, it kind of is what it is. Just can't see these stories through as some posts would seem to indicate I should. Appreciate you reading though!
Great story; a little fast but good, could use a little more build up to romance and suspense but this is your story and you must do it your way, I'll still read it.
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Anonymous06/08/16
I think this gifted author has found his niche
This is AP's first foray into the delightful subject of motherfucking, and we need more such stories from him. The turning point for 18 year old Steven comes when he finds what his mom used the mouse on his computer for. "I lifted my fingers to taste her, smell her. Caught up in a wave of something primal I pushed off my pants and boxer briefs and stroked myself off, quickly littering myself with a gigantic load of spunk." That's the way it is with young guys who've never consciously thought of their mother as sexually desirable. Let a boy get a whiff of that very special musky aroma and he gets real primal. Of course--it's his own mother's cunt smell, for any son more alluring than the priciest French perfumes. Steven is a lucky guy, his mom has a burning need, and it's for what her kid's got jumping around in his pants, his fat 8-incher. I love how after her boy fucks the living shit out of her, blows his young balls up his own birth canal, and gives her some much needed O's, his mother gives Steven's fat mommy-pleaser a squeeze and calls it her new favorite toy. It sure is--just like his mother's twat is his new favorite playground, where her big lusty son's going to making great big puddles every fucking chance he gets.
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Anonymous06/08/16
Our Summer of Grief
Someone wants ROMANCE.
A Mother, horny and desperate is not about to be romanced as she catches her son fisting himself. That's another day.
AP, a good story. I hope you're pursue this. If it took a week to write this, take two weeks to write the next. Breathe, Take some time. This isn't a rush to the climax.
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Anonymous06/08/16
Interesting twist
And a believable lead in. Cancer would make Dad progressively sicker and unable to make love, depending on the type of cancer. So the short time post funeral could have been months if not years of going without for Mom.
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A little too brief . . .
but it was well written. More buildup and details would help hold the reader's interest.
I notice that you have written other stories, so I'll read them also.
I agree.
I agree with grayge37. It is well written but brief, I would have preferred a slower build up and possibly 3 or 4 chapters. Having sid that I did enjoy the story.
Not to be rude...
...but I barely have time to write as is - so, for better or for worse, it kind of is what it is. Just can't see these stories through as some posts would seem to indicate I should. Appreciate you reading though!
more chapters about this story nice writing too
Liked it
Great story; a little fast but good, could use a little more build up to romance and suspense but this is your story and you must do it your way, I'll still read it.
I think this gifted author has found his niche
This is AP's first foray into the delightful subject of motherfucking, and we need more such stories from him. The turning point for 18 year old Steven comes when he finds what his mom used the mouse on his computer for. "I lifted my fingers to taste her, smell her. Caught up in a wave of something primal I pushed off my pants and boxer briefs and stroked myself off, quickly littering myself with a gigantic load of spunk." That's the way it is with young guys who've never consciously thought of their mother as sexually desirable. Let a boy get a whiff of that very special musky aroma and he gets real primal. Of course--it's his own mother's cunt smell, for any son more alluring than the priciest French perfumes. Steven is a lucky guy, his mom has a burning need, and it's for what her kid's got jumping around in his pants, his fat 8-incher. I love how after her boy fucks the living shit out of her, blows his young balls up his own birth canal, and gives her some much needed O's, his mother gives Steven's fat mommy-pleaser a squeeze and calls it her new favorite toy. It sure is--just like his mother's twat is his new favorite playground, where her big lusty son's going to making great big puddles every fucking chance he gets.
Our Summer of Grief
Someone wants ROMANCE.
A Mother, horny and desperate is not about to be romanced as she catches her son fisting himself. That's another day.
AP, a good story. I hope you're pursue this. If it took a week to write this, take two weeks to write the next. Breathe, Take some time. This isn't a rush to the climax.
Interesting twist
And a believable lead in. Cancer would make Dad progressively sicker and unable to make love, depending on the type of cancer. So the short time post funeral could have been months if not years of going without for Mom.
Short but well done. 5*
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