Brotherly Love Ch. 02

It's a fast paced wankfest and I like it very much, always nice to see a bro/sis story where they don't fumble around and actually admit the hots for each other. But one thing remains - I think he didn't actually tell her he dropped his GF, or am I wrong here?

4*

I gave you another 4*s

I know you are just starting out and you have promise. I have two suggestions if you want to make your stories better.
1) Get an editor or a proofreader. There are several obvious misspellings and other mistakes that detract from the story.
2) Be a little more realistic. I know the brother is only 21 but there is no way a guy can cum as often as you wrote him cumming. It too detracts from the story because even though readers know this is fiction, we want to think it is real.
Keep up with your writing and you will continue to improve.

Good Job !!!

Even though it could use some editing, it was good and exciting, just like PT.1
*5

It kinda sucked

bdsm yuk!!!