Great job Sweetie. I love reading your stories. :)
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04/10/04
Loved...
...the picture you painted in this story, especially the hunger the lovers felt for each other and the sense of anticipation of what's to come in the next chapter.
The only thing that would make the story better - IMHO - is if it were set in NYC. Somewhere like...the Plaza Hotel, perhaps...
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04/13/04
Makes me wanna book a vacation...NOW!
Again, Mark, you've shown your passion and tenderness well. This story opens up possibilities for more chapters, I do so encourage you to pursue those. You are quite talented.
~Ashleigh~
English
Great Story!!!
Great job Sweetie. I love reading your stories. :)
Loved...
...the picture you painted in this story, especially the hunger the lovers felt for each other and the sense of anticipation of what's to come in the next chapter.
The only thing that would make the story better - IMHO - is if it were set in NYC. Somewhere like...the Plaza Hotel, perhaps...
Makes me wanna book a vacation...NOW!
Again, Mark, you've shown your passion and tenderness well. This story opens up possibilities for more chapters, I do so encourage you to pursue those. You are quite talented.
~Ashleigh~
Vacation time...
A few spelling and punctuation errors, but still a hot story.
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