"The Stain"

I liked it

Nice satire on the cliches of LW. I enjoyed it. I was kind of surprised at the many jaded comments saying that she still cheated, even though you made it clear as day that she didn't. I don't assume anything that the author doesn't want me to assume. It is his universe. If he wanted to leave a hint of doubt that she cheated, then he would drop clues. If you have to add parts to the story from your own imagination, then you are reading too much into it.

Nicely done.

One more thing

The observation made by several commenters wondering about the baby that he was holding when he was taken down was fair. I was wondering that too. My opinion is that you wrote that scene at different times and that little detail got lost in the process. Done it myself once or twice and caught it during editing. Lol

Just heartwarning

I liked the satiric approach. The tongue in cheek usage of the cliches of this category. It is the right time for us all to know how over used some of them are. THx

Nice

Like your style and the storyline.

not working

Chase comes across as a bit retarded.
How did he manage to get a job as a high school math teacher?

Angela does give a lot of cheating wife signs.
She does act like she has outgrown her husband and their life together.
The things they did together and enjoyed together which are the things he still would enjoy are now stuff only 'commoners' do in her eyes.

Counterintuitive

Liked the short and (almost literally sweet) story. Think it was a nice send up of the typical symptoms. It's good to have some different at times! Thanks!

Total crap as usual

Always with the stupid loser husband and a heartless Cunt wife routine. It's very clear that she thinks little of her husband and she most definitely cheating and laughing at how stupid he is. Boring

beulahthebrit

Absolute, total rubbish, one could even call it `red-neck' crap. Please, please no more. Just send it to Donald.

Call me Different

Ouch, you got nailed by some readers. I on the other hand found it amusing and fun to read about your country boy who jumped to a quick conclusion. In Loving Wives I did not expect your ending and it made me chuckle. Thanks. BK

Sorry, the blouse unbuttoned, lawyer and office manager filing one transaction, the story is disjointed and does not work. The twist has to be part of the same story, not a gotcha added on.

one!

Hey.. why the hell do I want to read about your fucking kids, you idiot.

not sure

Why you got hammered by some commenters.
I found your story clever and amusing. A very welcome respite from cuckolding, betrayal, and totally unrealistic huge appendage fantasies.

He got hammered because he's a fucking cuckold faggot. The dumb cunt was lying to him, like cunts do, and instead of putting her in the ground somewhere they'll never find her along side her fucking boyfriend he wimps out like all of this author's "men" do. Probably because the author knows already how much he likes sucking nigger cum out of his own wife's nasty cunt and pretending not to know so he wants to write stories to make cuckolds and faggots out of everyone else. He needs to just eat a fucking bullet and end it all.

Marriage in stress

I think that you needed ine page to wrap things up.
It appears the family is past due for a vacation.
It sounded like the lack of time together had started driving a wedge.
Also something as important as a 40 plus year employee retirement party should have had Angela there from start to finish. Second child needed to be addressed also.
I liked the way both remained faithful to each other.

WAIT A MINUTE

She-it man! She just told him that she has a pussie infection? And the next paragraph she wants him to mango munch her but he wants shaved (shave and a haircut 2 bits) pussie? Dirty bitch? She is fucken around on him? Love you all! GREG. OH 100 % OF READING ENJOYMENT BYE. OH OH! If pussie is clean as in no disease! Cunty lapping (LOVE IT )

Nice

Inventive.
Reaaly well done.

Very inventive with a great twist.

I loved the twist you put in this story. Please keep up the good work!

One of my favorite Authors..

You're a genius in this genre. You're "Heartbreak Hotel" in 60 minutes or less. Freaking awesome.!!!!

Real

Sometimes it's easy to jump to the wrong conclusion and this story is a good example of how easily it can happen, another writer here wrote "believe nothing of what you hear and only half of what you see", which i take to mean to first confirm what you have heard and seen is correct before you act. In other words a stitch in time saves nine or look before you leap. Good yarn.