"The Stain"

Deaf guys

Another nice offbeat Carhovi story. The guys Carhovi often writes about are denser than a bag of hammers- not had sex in a month? Oh, I forgot she had an infection! Yikes, please don't pass those genes on to any more children. I liked the back and forth interruption dialogue- very clever. Overall, a clever little story while we wait for the long ones.

Good Read***

Very entertaining story I like your style. Thanks for sharing.

Nice short story, I enjoyed it. 5*

Nice

How 'bout that? A real loving husband and wife! Wait, do you think this fine tale should have had some hot sex woven in? I think it works out fine without. Oh well. I guess if this doesn't make you happy, go somewhere else for the hot, kinky stuff.

Five Stars

Ummm....wasn't he holding the baby when she pushed him against the door and she flips him on his back? some loving wife and mother there? Or did you simply forget you wrote that before she was using her karate on him?

PARANOIA RUNS DEEP

into the marriage it creeps. TK U MLJ LV NV

Chase's Charred Charm

I really began to dislike this Chase and his clipped lowbrow obscenities. His wife is all dolled up and he is all too proud to show up looking slovenly in jeans and a tee with mud on his shoes. Why? It's a nice party, asshole. Clean up and go show your wife off. I like the farmer part and the nod to agriculture. But why is he such a crass and dislikable person with palpably low-IQ communication? I don't get it.

Hmmm

Great marriage: she goes out on Friday nights (date night) without her husband? What kind of fucked up law firm does that? He shows up at her party like a slob? She comes late to a party for an honored coworker? He doesn't trust her and leaves on scant evidence? No phone calls? He sits at home waiting like a loser? She tells him her boss is gay for the first time that night? Close relationship! In five years she never mentions the guy is gay? Convienent and suspicious. He buys it? After condemning her for adjusting her blouse, he buys her gay story? Well written but not one of you better plots. It did not seem like your type of plot at all.

well he has had the wool pulled over his head

this lady is screwing around 4

Missed you

Good to see you back. Love your style and wordsmanship. Hope to see more!?

Kind of lame, . . .

and the husband comes off really stupid, and insecure. This didn't make any sense at all. Guess this was an effort to setup the reader and then yell surprise, it was all a misunderstanding? But you can't have it both ways. He relates his concerns in great detail, regarding changes in her behavior, attitude, work schedule, which has taken place over months. And then she refutes and explains everything, in 3 minutes?

This marriage is in trouble. Maybe not for the reasons he related, but obviously there is suspicion, lack of communication and trust, and lack of respect. A very tepid shallow relationship if she is acting in ways he doesn't understand, and is just now confronting her about why. And of course, the boss is gay, and she never mentioned that to her husband. Yeah, a real close tightly knit marriage. About as tight as this stories plot.

Way below your experience and potential; try again.

Thank you

I enjoyed this, and you other stories, as a fun enjoyable read. Thanks for your efforts and sharing.

A good set up, for what was coming in the second half...

A good set up, for what was coming in the second half...The first part the writer fills the balloon with drama, with the expectation for the final confrontation...The second part is the balloon deflates in a serie of funny parts...3*

Good dialogue!

Damn, I really enjoy your stories. Thanks!

totally lame

little pathetic insecure hubby went off half-cocked. now she'll be smarter about it.

5

great LW story. Annony is just an old ugly fat fag who hates every thing.

Excellent

Great tale and well written. Thanks for writing and sharing!

I liked it. Thank you.

Whackadoodle, it is really about insecurity.

not bad jedd

Dude needs to invest in some bugs though to verify with her. Good story though I never mind the happy ending.

This is to "Bull Shit".

You didn't get it did you. A few others didn't. I am a man. I have a wife. I have lots of kids.I repeatedly hear what women have to say, their point of view as it were. In their view most of us men can never ever have or get hemorrhoids; God made us that way. My protagonist reflects that perspective.

This was supposed to be fun, that's all. For a short story with a more thoughtful message try one of these. If you want heartache read Francis MacComber's "Funny You Should Ask". If you want real infidelity read Troubadour's "How High a Price". If you want a sense of masculine inadequacy read Matt Moreau. Come on I warned everyone up front; this wasn't going to be Chekhov. Damn man, the wife is unfaithful? The wife's name should've stymied that thought.

Jedd Clampett

Excellent satire

You flipped the LW script and shot down almost every LW trope with this one. Nicely done. I almost gave up on this one, as the narrator's "plain-spoken" dialog drove me nuts, but I'm glad I rode it to the end. Maybe it was unintentional, but I couldn't help but picture Jimmy Stewart as the narrator and Donna Reed as Angela. Their dialog was straight out of It's a Wonderful Life.

I used a similar theme of the insecure husband and suspected lover who turned out to be gay in one of my stories, and was hammered for it by this crowd. They don't like being fooled. Still, it's all in good fun, and this was a fun read. Perfect for a Friday.

****

Short and a tad shallow. Not a bad little ditty even with all the "whats" left over.
Thx.

SwingerJoe, you left out the little detail that your "suspected lover who turned out to be gay" story was a follow-up to someone else's story where the setup didn't really leave room for that possibility. The wife had been caught making out with the guy in public and gave him her panties. A gay man's interest in such activities would be what?

Oasis

This is an oasis in a desert. Night after night I suffer for the pleasure of the occasional gem like this. Of course there are those who can't tell shit from clay. Please ignore them and keep writing.

Entertaining

Story...expected a cheating wife and turned out the opposite...refreshing...thanks again.

Thank you for the Beverly Hillbilly's moment

Kind of lame satire I would think. To many stereotypes. 4*s

That was a cool story .I'm sure it surprised everyone

I never expected that ending, he got it all wrong. But still how did she climb up the latter in a law office so fast. A real change of pace story.

im confused

Was he still holding the baby when she kneed him in the balls and pushed him on the ground and started kissing him?

What Eddboy said

Pretty good little story with a less than smart man but I get caught up in details sometime and the baby had to go somewhere before the 5'2" wife knees and flips her big farmer, coach, teacher, husband.

Wait, how did the baby get from his arms to wherever she was that they could roll around without hurting her?

he should not be too surprised

she is the same now as when she was in school. He needs to upgrade his wardrobe enough so that people would recognize him as a professional, he is a teacher after all. And maybe work on his self esteem issues.

Fun

Unfortunately very unlikely to happen.

No continuity, two bad stories that don't match

It's like you had a checklist of cheating wives stories, hit every element, then decided to throw a twist in the ending.

Baby spit and unbuttoned blouse don't match, unless she's nursing.

Unlikeable character

I hated the main character and was just thinking, "damn, I wouldn't blame her for kicking his dumb ass to the curb. I really dislike stories where the spouse just jumps to all kind of stupid conclusions and gets stupid. At least he didn't go to the bar and get piss drunk like a lot of the idiots in this genre.

Maybe it's just a personal preference but it just left me feeling annoyed.
JessicaAlexander

Good story

Well written with an "O,Henry" ending.
Thanks

I have been conned

I think you have written a witty and imaginative short story that serves as a caution against premature assumptions for characters and readers alike.. Ultimately I think it was your most dedicated fans who were the most gullible. I was certain that you were setting us up for a character like Greta in Hearth and Home. Instead we get a truly loving wife who is way smarter than her "insightful" husband. OOPS

bad

I read all your stuff. Why ?? It is good.

Throw this in the trash because it is stupid.

MCPO Jim

Hate to say it

but when I saw who the author was and the story started with late Friday nights, etc., I saw this end coming from the beginning. Still a good story.

In reality, H probably should verify W: She is 24 years old and taking over management of what appears to be a fairly large law firm and has admittedly pushed over people to get there. Sounds like a real aggressive person who may not care who gets in her way to get what she wants. Goes out every Friday night drinking with the "gang" and leaves the office all the time during the day. None of this happens at my firm. If it did, I would believe there was a reason for the H to be concerned.

anon.1

I prefer truth in advertising.

Should have called this one 'Red Herring' (that title hasn't been used yet) old son.

The misleading clues were cruel and sadistic and I felt suckered at the end you mongrel.

In short, loved it. Keep em coming.

Yes, a mother with a stained blouse would make some attempt to clean it and might leave some buttons undone. Yes the infection revelation was a little cheap. All's fair in love and fiction.

Liked it!

Thanks for sharing! I thought this was a great tale and enjoy the rather lighthearted reprieve from the usual darkness that can be LW. Don't get me wrong I love a good dark cheater story but it is nice to read about couples who genuinely care for each other also.

-Ahaz

I'm curious

Yes, I'm really curious. Where are all the comments from everyone on any non cuck, hotwife or swinger story that are prevalent here in the LW comments section ? You know the ones I'm speaking of , the " Oh why is he such a saint" , and " Why does the woman always have to be written so stupid" . Yeah those that are as common as mushrooms after a rain , they all seem to be cut and pasted in their repetitions in any story not of the aforementioned plots.
Oh, and let's not forget "It's the same old plot" folks either while we're at it. Where are they with their same cut and pasted mantras ?
It's just not the same here in commentsworld without them . Not!
Sorry Carvohi , couldn't help myself.
Nice little tale, I must admit that if not for your opening remarks, I would have been in a conspiratorial frame of mind myself. Well , I mean look where we are , Lol.
This is the second light hearted story of the day, and both were fairly well done.
4*'s

Jumping to conclusions is dangerous

Communicate is always the moral of the story. Well written. xoxoxoxo Annette

Hahaha!

Fun 4 star short.

Thank You

Good little story, a blessing for heart and soul

BULL!

I still think she cheated.

The price of habitually reading loving wives stories and purchasing discount pregnancy strip

The false positive fallout is a bitch. Deft storytelling. I thank the author for sharing.

Enjoyed it

Until I read this line . . .
"I'm as bare as Kierra."
That's the kind of mental image that would kill any thought of sex.

Meh

I usually like your writing, but this one was pretty poor.

Two things were put out there,and never really explained. One was her inexplicably rapid advancement, which really couldn't have happened if she wasn't sleeping her way to the top,

The second was their Death Valley sex life.Yes, she had the vaginal infection, but does that preclude blow jobs?

Carvohi on the defensive!

Carvohi came out swinging immediately at the first anon comment on this story which painted the tale as being poor. Well, Carvohi, it IS poor. As many prior comments HAVE demonstrated she has all the symptoms of a cheater. Read your own tale! Rapid rise when "lover boy" shows up, decline in sex, suddenly getting home later, two people doing a task usually done by one, stain on blouse (ha to baby food), unbuttoned blouse, etc. And HOW did she know her likely lover as Gay. Then she assaults him. Gave it 2* based on your usual postings..actually deserved a 1*

Fair story...a little different

I got lost in the second page. When wifey gets home we read...
"I walked inside, turned around and took the baby and said, 'All right what's going on?'
...
I was holding our baby, she had her hands on her hips."

Then wifey is kneeing him in the nuts and then is sitting on his face with his crotch. What happened to the baby? Never read where she was put down or what happened to her, only that she was getting fussy.

Not your usual standard, but I still gave it 4 *'s.