Road to the Sun Ch. 04

Great Story!

I was very pleased, to see that you are continuing this story! I have really enjoyed it since the first chapters were posted and have always wanted to see it develop. Thanks, for your efforts and I will await additional installments!

I've just noticed that you have carried on

I read the first chapter when it appeared, when no more came out after chapter 2 I stopped keeping an eye out for you. I have to say I was surprised and really pleased to see you back. This is a good read and very erotic. Thanks also to Grand Teton, if he is involved it acts as a guarantee of quality.

A truly great read

I ran across literotica about an hour ago. And decided to explore the taboo section. I then chose to make the Road to the Sun series my first read. I found that chapters 1-3 where very much to my liking and then when I got to chapter 4, wow! As my first post to this site I must say Thank you for a truly great story. I gave it 5*. I can only hope that other stories on this site are of equal quality. Keep up this fantastic series. I know I for one will be keeping this on on my watch list.

Welcome Back

I had almost given up hope that you would continue this series. It has an interesting grip. Here are kids in the midst of a real mess not of their own making but they manage to keep their spirits up and to take care of each other. The sex is well written but it isn't the best part of their love and caring. On the other hand, it'll do in a pinch. Keep up the good work.

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OMG!

This is the best chapter so far! So fucking happy that you have not left this story die. One the the hottest and best sex scenes I have ever came across. My blommers were soaking wet before I could finish. Very Well done.

house?

In which upcoming chapter do they finally figure out they have been staying in the guest cottage and the mansion they were admiring was actually their real home all along?

Great

Great to see this story back it's been a long time since the last chapter. Hope to see the next chapter very soon.

Truly Wonderful

Most of the stories I have read, are all about sex with some story line fashioned around them. Your story is a love story that has sex that emphasizes that love. That's the way I see it anyways. The sex is erotic and comes into play at just the right time. This story almost made me cry. How I would love to have a love life like this. Keep up the excellent work!

Thank You

I would like to thank you all for the great comments and feedback that I have received. Sorry for the wait, but do hope the chapter made up for it. I had originally thought that it would only be about 5 chapters long, however I think to be able to tell this story, it will be a great many more than that. TO answer a few people's questions: The twins, Cindy and Melody, are based on a set of twins I came to know while I was in college. They had the eyes. So...I guess you can safely say I have and eye fetish. :)

Great chapter!!!!

I loved this so far, keep them coming.

Are the other two going to get jealous of the relationship between Melody and Jame's or maybe join in?

Sweet way to pop up

Was very happy to see that you back. Chapter 4 is incredible. A fantastic chapter to celebrate your return.

Continues to get...

...better and better.

I'm very interested in seeing where this goes. You've given us quite a few not-so-subtle hints that foreshadow...*something*---or, more likely, *somethings*. For one thing, the heterochromia (not "heterchromia", and it doesn't need to be capitalized) is either going somewhere or you're violating the old principle about having a cannon onstage during the first act. (If you do that, you have to fire it before the last act's over.)

If you're going to follow up on all of those hints, you're certainly going to need more than just one more chapter. I hope you can find the time to produce those other chapters before too long. (Next time, have the whole damned thing written before you post the first chapter. That's what I do. Not only does it keep your readers happier, it slows you down and makes you think about how things are connected to each other.)

Want to see where this goes. More please

Where have all the flowers gone?

I just realized what flowers went where. O.K. so I might not have gotten it as fast as some of you, but... I got it. Gteat story by the way.

Fantastic

I couldn't help but read all the chapters back to back! Interesting story line and great characters. Seems to be almost real. Very Well done! Looking forward to the next chapter.

SWEET

I am really enjoying reading this story.Nice build up in rhe previous chapters and then you hit us with this. This is by far the best chapter. Great work and looking everyday for the next chapter .

Best chapter by far

No doubt about it. Very hot and stimulating. Looking forward to chapter 5. Love the way your girls act.

Chapter 05 update

It has been set off for editing! So, with a little luck, it won't be too much longer.

Why do I get the impression there's going to be a twist in the plot ?

I thought earlier there might be more to this than you'd let on. But the clues in this chapter make me think I'm on the right lines here.
I won't say more and give it away if I'm correct, but I'm looking forward to chapter 5 whether I'm correct or not.
Great story, very well written, loving every page !

Can't leave it here

I hope that you haven't given up on this story , there's so much more to go!