Violet Ch. 02

Well written and complling

Your exploration of Violet's various neuroses' and hang-ups was both masterful and interesting enough to keep me reading; once again I found myself unable to not read through to the end, even though the subject matter is so far out of my own comfort-zone. An easy 5 stars

Thank you soooooo much!

@BeachBum
Extremely flattering. Extremely high praise. Thank you for giving Violet a chance. It’s incredibly validating to have Violet be well received despite that it's not simply straight ahead incest. I appreciate both your comments greatly, and take them both to heart.

same story you posted 1/16/16

Why are we seeing this same story you posted 5 months ago???

Redundancy is redundant

@Anon
Chapter 1 includes an intro explaining briefly that this story was taken down for personal reasons and reposted with minor corrections. I didn't think it was necessary to put a disclaimer on both

Love the story

While your story telling is almost addictively compelling, I do find myself a little annoyed when you characters suddenly switch language and I have no idea what they are saying. I know it is quite obvious which ball park the conversation is in, I just feel that it breaks the flow of the story for me, so if it is not too much hassle please translate for those of us too lazy to learn 2nd or 3rd languages.

Many Thanks

Damoscinos

Thank you

@Damo
Thank you so much. I sincerely appreciate every compliment and every opinion.

The inclusion of untranslated Spanish dialogue is fully intentional. On the one hand, the dialogue is largely instructional. You may not understand what is being commanded, but I went to lengths to try and have the actions explain themselves. The dialogue can be inferred, for the most part. I think that the big three Romance languages (Italian/Spanish/French) are incredibly, incredibly sexy sounding, and just that by itself warrants inclusion in stories from time to time.

On the other hand, the intentional lack of translations is alienating by design, which you and many others have picked up on. It’s meant to help you feel what Violet feels; left out, and yet unable to look away (or in the case of the reader, stop reading). That discomfort and struggle then is paid off in the final scene, where Ariana subtly begins the process of teaching Violet some Spanish as they walk into the house. Literally and metaphorically bringing Violet into the family.

My goal is always to write stories that stay with you. To make a mark and lurk in the back of the minds of readers. I hope that I've done that.

I have to agree...

...with beachbum1958. When I saw the tags, I passed the story by. But when I saw his comment, I decided to read it.

Five stars.

Yuuuuge

@CarlusMagnus
A huge thank you for giving Violet a chance, no matter what the circumstances were. Thank you for your comment, and for having the maturity to differentiate between not liking *part* of a story and not liking a story.

If you want people to read your story...

...provide a more descriptive name and a meaningful description. I haven't read your story. "Violet Ch. 01, Chapter 1" and "Violet Ch. 02, Chapter 2" tell me nothing and I prefer not to risk my time on a pig in a poke.

@8letters
My goals and methods are my own. I am not writing to build a fanbase in the hopes of parlaying that into a career. I write what I write, and I call it what I want. You do you, boo, but don't presume to tell me how to do me.

Excellent

I like your short story and it was very sexy to me.. Keeping writing your own style of story telling.. I had an orgasm and didn't need to touch myself..ummmmm

Impressive

I was originally drawn to your series by a what I thought may have been a brother / sister story. At first I was put off by the Spanish until I saw your explanation of it - then it made total sense. A very unique style of writing to be sure, but you have done it effectively and deserve credit for that. As you might deduce from my screen name, I can understand the conflicted feelings in my own way. Great job.

Dean

I like the way the story flows. I also like the dialogue you have created, it brings the two sisters together in a powerful way, good exposition. I would have liked a bit more background on Mom and how she got where she is in the story.

Engrossed again

I remember reading this series of stories several months ago and yet I am still thoroughly intrigued enough to read through both chapters again. I do hope that this time you can post more than you did previously in regards to this series. Loving it as much this time as I did before.

Thank you

@Anon
A hands-free orgasm, because of my story, means I win Literotica. Thank you for letting my story affect you that deeply, because that kind of connection requires you to be open to it.

Thank You

@CDChrystal
I bet you do. I'm glad to hear this story connected with you, and that it rang true for you. I'm glad that you found something you weren't looking for, and enjoyed it all the same.

Thank You

@Dean-Anon
There are many layers of inspiration for this story, but one of them was a story a friend of mine wrote. It was about a brother and sister, and the story started when they moved into their own apartment together. It sidestepped the beginning of their feelings for each other, and it sidestepped the 'getting away with it'. It skipped all the emotional stuff and jumped to "Here's two people fucking, and oh by the way they're siblings."

No judgement. It was a popular story, and people liked it. I was inspired to do something different though. Thank you for appreciating the buildup, and the gradual introduction of the tension. In my mind, that always makes the payoff that much more powerful.

Thank you

@The last two Anons

There was originally a lot more going to happen in this story, but I've decided to end it here. The plot became very convoluted after this, and largely persisted as a vehicle for sex. That’s fine sometimes, but I wasn't happy with it. I'm working on another story very slowly that explores some of the same kinks with more external plot with a little more legs on it.

One of the things I didn't have time to get into as much as I wanted was the relationship between Arianna and Valentina. It’s extremely ritulaistic. Everything they do, every word, movement and nuance, is foreplay building up to the next time they fuck. It’s something they do together, that they crafted together over years and years both to protect themselves, and they do it to make sure every time hit the notes they both needed.

Valentina was put in a very bad situation by her ex-husband. She was basically forced to stay home from the day they married, and that was used against her in the custody battle. That she had no job and no means of providing for Violet. She made the painful decision to stop pursuing custody of Violet so that she could raise Arianna without him at all. By the time this story starts, Valentina has achieved some success for herself, due to her aggressive and assertive nature.

Probably one of the best reads ever

I wanna know if and when yku will write and publish a third chapter where the mother and daughter's work to build a relationship together. I really only have kne complaint/suggestion for the next chapter "PLEASE PUT ENGLISH TRANSLATIONS IN BRACKETS FOR SPANISH DIALOGUE!!!" I am from South Africa and i dont a sliver of Spanish outside of Si and "Me hablo no Espanol" switching between Google translate is already Hard enough on my phone. Please please remember this for those who don't know Spanish