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by jthserra04/05/04

Expressive, but needs

a bit of tightening up. You'll want to drop the apostrophe on always in the first stanza, and you might consider rewording that last stanza a bit, it seems to stumble some. Read it outloud and modify until it feels fluid. The emotion here is clear, just need a little cleaning.


jim : )

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