Helpful Sister in Law

Punctuation? Dialogue?

Kid, gotta learn how to write before posting something will just outright embarrass you.

Absolutely dreadful writing!!

You've not the faintest idea of how to write properly, dreadful grammar and punctuation.
Go back to school and ask nicely to be allowed into an English lesson!
As for those who 'Favorited' this rubbish, they should be ashamed that their reading ability is so poor!!

Fucking awful

Please dont continue one load of shit is enough

Mneh.

Great story overall. The people who say "shitty grammar" need to learn how to read shitty writing. I could read it. But people that are mentally challenged like YOU dont know how to. Sure good writing is nice and all. But learn to piece shit together mate!

wow.

The story was great but have you ever heard of fucking punctuations? I didn't understand who was talking and everything happened so quick. Other than that.. thanks for the huge orgasm. I squirted hard.

Re: Mneh.

"The people who say "shitty grammar" need to learn how to read shitty writing. I could read it."


You could read it because you're another one of those mindless bots that applaud any type of shit posted on this site. I bet English was your worst course in school.

Crapola

STOPPED reading soon as I read the 9" cock line. BULLSHIT!!! Less than .003% of the population of the world have over 8" so get a friggin life. Killed a story.....

How many people have to complain about that "shitty grammar" before it sinks in with the functionally illiterate?

Could I "piece together" what the author had written? Yes, after a fashion. Was it annoying to have to "piece together" what someone had written (and I use the term "written" in only the loosest possible interpretation of the word)? Abso-fucking-lutely.

There is "spoken grammar" and then there is "written grammar". In the spoken version, it's not so terrible to use fragments and the equivalents of grunts to communicate. But in the written version, it makes readers cringe, and feel pity for those who just don't know how to communicate clearly, and correctly.

..."One guy was a very good friend with Janet, had not caught them yet but knew I would one of these days. And guess what, dick head was there as I turned into our drive, I could see them through the window hugging and what looked like kissing, as soon as they heard the car they broke apart."

I could point out just the errors in punctuation, but why bother? If you're bright, you can spot them. If you can't, then you're just not that bright, apparently.

When an author doesn't know whether to use a comma or a period (or possibly, what those things even ARE), it's embarrassing. When they don't know WHERE to use them, it's embarrassing. It kind of makes me think of a monkey in a zoo, shitting in it's hand and flinging the feces at a wall, except that the monkey is probably more accurate.

re: Mneh.

That comment says a lot about you, and none of it was good.

Don't you just love it when one of the asshole grammar Nazis (E_J) gets his grammar wrong?

"Shitting in it's hand" where "Shitting in its hand" is wanted?

Your story was arousing and has much potential !! While, yes you need to clean up some grammar; you are on the right track. Just add some background as you develop the story line further and it will all fall into place !! You need to give us more details about what the people look like besides big cock; like hair colors, height, things like that some readers can get an image of what the characters look like.
You'll get the hang of it :) Now, what does the hubby do with the red headed sister ?? They have to develop a relationship and he has to dump his wife who has been cheating on him. Thanks and hope another chapter comes soon.

Good story!

Yes, please continue. Write another "5"!!!