All Comments on 'Homeless'

How I wish there were more such stories on LE, it was sweet and cute and adorable and caring and giving all at the same time. And that blushing only added immense value.

5*!!!!!!

Cute beyond what I was expecting.!** Why don't more writers put a few like this one in there to do stories from time to time.?** I would really like to read one along this line every week or so ~~ oh did I say I really liked the Story.? lol ( 5 ) ATW = THX.

This story is very good, and I would like to see how the relationship progresses!

I have never commented on a story here before, so please accept this as constructive criticism.

A good read, but I felt your story was slightly rushed.

I am no writer, but I think this story - although there may be more chapters - deserved to be expanded upon. Especially as they are both virgins.

Please take your time and let us enjoy their explorations, senses, feelings and euphoric orgasms as your characters do.

I look forward to further chapters... and more stories from you.

Stikes a chord. My fiance had issues too

Like another commentator I felt the overall story was rather compressed and needed fuller developement of the plot and characters.

Firstly you don't see homeless angels. Even if you do they are muddy and stinky, unless the plot explains how a beautiful girl ended up on the street, it's worthless. Moreover a homeless person never hugs you Impulsively, they have went through so many miseries that they are usually vary of kind strangers. It's a fantasy story that doesn't strike any chord towards grounded realists like me.

Needs more chapters. They need to keep going, get married and have lots of children! Wonderful story!

Good concept, but really rushed.

Don't take a morning after pill. In a couple months she'll say, "honey, your new wife is having a baby" and we'd better get married".

What a sweet story with an even sweeter ending. The only reason I gave this five stars is because there wasn't a sixth star to give.

This tale lived up to your writing name, too fast too quick, slow it down a bit and it’ll be better for it, thanks ****