People usually have a strong aversion to breaking the taboo/incest line, and the writer needs to convey convincingly why the participants cross the line, and I prefer that there be love involved (whether it's slow and deliberate and languid or hot, hard, and rutty is a circumstance of the moment).
But this was so well done from the outset that I was drawn in. Whether you add more chapters or leave this as is -- you could do either. But you know that whatever happens to Kevin, Kelly, and Marsha, with Kelly being so focused on the heart that love for her trumps social convention (which is at the heart of most of these type of stories), that she and Kevin will be strong and we hope and presume are in it for the long haul. Marsha may or may not be permanent, though it appears that she may consider it, or at least hang around until she's healed enough to move on.
Characters are believable and the story flowed smoothly from beginning to end. Bravo. Thank you for sharing. 5*
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continue
need more
Oh Please!
Oh please continue! This story has the makings for many wonderful chapters to follow. Keep it going for a few please!
I usually like more lead in
People usually have a strong aversion to breaking the taboo/incest line, and the writer needs to convey convincingly why the participants cross the line, and I prefer that there be love involved (whether it's slow and deliberate and languid or hot, hard, and rutty is a circumstance of the moment).
But this was so well done from the outset that I was drawn in. Whether you add more chapters or leave this as is -- you could do either. But you know that whatever happens to Kevin, Kelly, and Marsha, with Kelly being so focused on the heart that love for her trumps social convention (which is at the heart of most of these type of stories), that she and Kevin will be strong and we hope and presume are in it for the long haul. Marsha may or may not be permanent, though it appears that she may consider it, or at least hang around until she's healed enough to move on.
Characters are believable and the story flowed smoothly from beginning to end. Bravo. Thank you for sharing. 5*
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