This is probably one of my favorite stories on the site. It's a great mix of a lot different themes we get some surrogacy issues, sexual empowerment, female sexuality, love, lies, loss; and it makes the journey with Molly all the more enjoyable.
The only minus for me is the final few pages, you did a great job setting up the big sexual confrontation with Mary and Paul but I thought the resolution was a bit weak. Mary treats her son worse than any other male in the story, even worse than the creepy producer. She takes what he wants most and uses it against him in the worst possible way. This is of course after she'd already rejected his feelings once but decides to go a step further and ton harder in crushing him. The time between when the sexual encounter and reconciliation is too short and drops the tension the story had been building. Would've been great to see them come back together from opposite sides of the argument; Mary considering being with him and Paul questioning whether they could be together. An extra page or two on that would've been great.
Anyway kudos to you for this tale and the many others you've written here.
Your story is incredibly good and deserves the rating it has.. Even so, I struggled to get through the middle of it. I'm typically not a fan of parent/child incest. Really prefer Megan and Mark. However, I enjoyed when Molly came out and exerted her individuality. I like a touch of crazy and you interject that very well. Mary and Molly are polar opposites and I like Molly more.
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Anonymous01/25/17
Great writer, lousy story
This crosses a line that doesn't need to be crossed. The difference between animals and humans is choice. Any living being capable of sexual reproduction can become excited enough to complete the act. Humans uniquely have the ability to choose their response. Mary's choice was to be a molesting slut, just like her father. A more revealing story would be to chronicle the painful aftermath of her decisions. She also chose not to listen to Dan, who gave her excellent advice. A person doesn't have to live in a slutty alter ego to enjoy a lusty and diverse sex life with a loving partner. John was not wrong to want those things within their relationship. Mary's identity crisis also highlights her broken psychological state and how ill equipped she was to deal safely with Paul's misplaced lust. If this story were accurately categorized, it would be a Tragedy.
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Anonymous01/26/17
Agree totally with last Anony, this thing is awful
The other review today nailed it, this is a sad piece of work from a normally excellent writer.
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Anonymous01/31/17
Agree with the comments on 1/25 and 1/26, disappointing effort from fine author
This is a sad study of some very disturbed individuals. If this is consistent with from this author, I'm having seconds thoughts about reading further submissions.
Thank you, its a compliment. I don't generally reply to comments, but felt the need on this. For people who have followed me early on here or others who have read my complete library(sturdy souls you are) I made my bones here with Siblings with benefits which was never overly popular, but was a dark grim tale filled with addiction, abuse, mental illness and a lot of violence.
Why? Because as much as I enjoy the fun fantasy style incest or the fluffy romantic style, I like going against the grain and throwing some -gasp-reality in and reality often times is not pretty.
Stories like Mama's Boy, That damn red dress, SWB and now Molly Minx they are all on the darker side and deal with not just 'hot incest' but real life issues.
So for those who enjoyed it, thank you. For the recent comments saying it was sad and too much? Thank you as well. My goal is to get emotional responses and strike a nerve from time to time. Your critique is my personal success.
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Anonymous02/12/17
Anony 1/25 here, LC, enjoy many stories but you're replies ignore "reality"
You speak of these incest stories and being injects of reality. How?? 99.99% of the relationships out there aren't based on incestuous practices. It happens, but it's rare. The reality is the destruction that occurs when these relationships happen and fold under the public pressure or die of when the lust inevitably lessens. That's "reality" and to date I haven't read one of your stories that deals with it. Just admit it, it's something you like or have lived. Either way, it's not reality. That's just an excuse to rationalize the criticisms. This one is just especially sad and disturbing in the way it ignores the pain and destruction that's surely to unfold. Like Dan's advice, it's ignored for a momentary rush of pleasure and swept aside and ignored.
First off I have no issue whatsoever with your critique or opinion. I want to make that clear. I take the good/bad and indifferent all the same. I do take issue with it coming from anonymous. I take things a little more seriously when the other person can put a 'face' to their remarks. If that's snarky its because after 6 years of being trolled by faceless people fueled with bandwidth courage I have reached the point where its more and more annoying.
For reality well you have obviously never read SWB, As for something I like or experienced? Of course I enjoy incest, if I didn't why would I write so many stories which for the most part are fun and/or romantic? I openly admit to having the 'kink'. Have I lived it? No, not at all.
Reality in incest translates into it not being all fun and games and something about it being destructive...you don't think Mary's first encounter with her son was destructive?
As writers we interpret our visions in words. As readers you will interpret it in your way. Ten readers will have ten interpretations. None right, none wrong for anyone but them.
Thank you for taking the time to voice your take on things.
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Anonymous02/13/17
LC, Anony 1/25
First, as far as ''faceless trolls" I'd LOVE not to be "anony". But the Geico cavemen could admin this site better. After months of trying them to get ANYONE at Lit to get me back in my jahoo account, I've given up. I can understand your frustration with some anonymous accounts, but I believe my commentary has been only about this story and nothing personal. Secondly, I'm not putting you or anyone down for having a real life incest event. I am certain however that "reality" isn't anything to do with incest for all but a small part of the planet. And I've grown frustrated with the way it seems to be cavalierly embraced on this site. Lastly, we'll agree to disagree on some things but you are still a very talented writer. Thank you for taking the time to respond.
Hate filling up a comments section with conversation, but only way I can 'speak' with you. I could not agree more about how this site is run. Think its bad for the story side? See what goes on the forum. The favoritism, politics and the blatant encouraging of bullying and abuse especially towards women.
No one got back to you because this site is maintained so poorly that the 'contact us' button has not worked in years. I believe this is on purpose to not get complaints and to hide from LE in regards to countless revenge porn violations and other issues.
Is there anything realistic about incest as it pertains to the fantasy on this site? Not much. I'm the first one to say 99% of real life incest is abuse and disturbing. But on a site like this or in e-books with this material its 18+ 99% consensual and just the fun aspects that seemed to have really started with Kay Parker so its simply fun here. Still better than non consent which is rape in real life and rape and abuse in fiction, but people still get off to it.
BTW lit says they don't allow rape....have you seen their non consent section? All you need to know about the hypocrisy here.
You should contact me through feedback with an e-mail I can respond to. Would like to continue this conversation.
English
Favorite writer here.
You are one of my favorite writers. Just brilliant.
Kudos
This is probably one of my favorite stories on the site. It's a great mix of a lot different themes we get some surrogacy issues, sexual empowerment, female sexuality, love, lies, loss; and it makes the journey with Molly all the more enjoyable.
The only minus for me is the final few pages, you did a great job setting up the big sexual confrontation with Mary and Paul but I thought the resolution was a bit weak. Mary treats her son worse than any other male in the story, even worse than the creepy producer. She takes what he wants most and uses it against him in the worst possible way. This is of course after she'd already rejected his feelings once but decides to go a step further and ton harder in crushing him. The time between when the sexual encounter and reconciliation is too short and drops the tension the story had been building. Would've been great to see them come back together from opposite sides of the argument; Mary considering being with him and Paul questioning whether they could be together. An extra page or two on that would've been great.
Anyway kudos to you for this tale and the many others you've written here.
Not so into Mom
Your story is incredibly good and deserves the rating it has.. Even so, I struggled to get through the middle of it. I'm typically not a fan of parent/child incest. Really prefer Megan and Mark. However, I enjoyed when Molly came out and exerted her individuality. I like a touch of crazy and you interject that very well. Mary and Molly are polar opposites and I like Molly more.
Great writer, lousy story
This crosses a line that doesn't need to be crossed. The difference between animals and humans is choice. Any living being capable of sexual reproduction can become excited enough to complete the act. Humans uniquely have the ability to choose their response. Mary's choice was to be a molesting slut, just like her father. A more revealing story would be to chronicle the painful aftermath of her decisions. She also chose not to listen to Dan, who gave her excellent advice. A person doesn't have to live in a slutty alter ego to enjoy a lusty and diverse sex life with a loving partner. John was not wrong to want those things within their relationship. Mary's identity crisis also highlights her broken psychological state and how ill equipped she was to deal safely with Paul's misplaced lust. If this story were accurately categorized, it would be a Tragedy.
Agree totally with last Anony, this thing is awful
The other review today nailed it, this is a sad piece of work from a normally excellent writer.
Agree with the comments on 1/25 and 1/26, disappointing effort from fine author
This is a sad study of some very disturbed individuals. If this is consistent with from this author, I'm having seconds thoughts about reading further submissions.
To the comments about sad and disturbing.
Thank you, its a compliment. I don't generally reply to comments, but felt the need on this. For people who have followed me early on here or others who have read my complete library(sturdy souls you are) I made my bones here with Siblings with benefits which was never overly popular, but was a dark grim tale filled with addiction, abuse, mental illness and a lot of violence.
Why? Because as much as I enjoy the fun fantasy style incest or the fluffy romantic style, I like going against the grain and throwing some -gasp-reality in and reality often times is not pretty.
Stories like Mama's Boy, That damn red dress, SWB and now Molly Minx they are all on the darker side and deal with not just 'hot incest' but real life issues.
So for those who enjoyed it, thank you. For the recent comments saying it was sad and too much? Thank you as well. My goal is to get emotional responses and strike a nerve from time to time. Your critique is my personal success.
Anony 1/25 here, LC, enjoy many stories but you're replies ignore "reality"
You speak of these incest stories and being injects of reality. How?? 99.99% of the relationships out there aren't based on incestuous practices. It happens, but it's rare. The reality is the destruction that occurs when these relationships happen and fold under the public pressure or die of when the lust inevitably lessens. That's "reality" and to date I haven't read one of your stories that deals with it. Just admit it, it's something you like or have lived. Either way, it's not reality. That's just an excuse to rationalize the criticisms. This one is just especially sad and disturbing in the way it ignores the pain and destruction that's surely to unfold. Like Dan's advice, it's ignored for a momentary rush of pleasure and swept aside and ignored.
anony 1/25
First off I have no issue whatsoever with your critique or opinion. I want to make that clear. I take the good/bad and indifferent all the same. I do take issue with it coming from anonymous. I take things a little more seriously when the other person can put a 'face' to their remarks. If that's snarky its because after 6 years of being trolled by faceless people fueled with bandwidth courage I have reached the point where its more and more annoying.
For reality well you have obviously never read SWB, As for something I like or experienced? Of course I enjoy incest, if I didn't why would I write so many stories which for the most part are fun and/or romantic? I openly admit to having the 'kink'. Have I lived it? No, not at all.
Reality in incest translates into it not being all fun and games and something about it being destructive...you don't think Mary's first encounter with her son was destructive?
As writers we interpret our visions in words. As readers you will interpret it in your way. Ten readers will have ten interpretations. None right, none wrong for anyone but them.
Thank you for taking the time to voice your take on things.
LC, Anony 1/25
First, as far as ''faceless trolls" I'd LOVE not to be "anony". But the Geico cavemen could admin this site better. After months of trying them to get ANYONE at Lit to get me back in my jahoo account, I've given up. I can understand your frustration with some anonymous accounts, but I believe my commentary has been only about this story and nothing personal. Secondly, I'm not putting you or anyone down for having a real life incest event. I am certain however that "reality" isn't anything to do with incest for all but a small part of the planet. And I've grown frustrated with the way it seems to be cavalierly embraced on this site. Lastly, we'll agree to disagree on some things but you are still a very talented writer. Thank you for taking the time to respond.
"anony'
Hate filling up a comments section with conversation, but only way I can 'speak' with you. I could not agree more about how this site is run. Think its bad for the story side? See what goes on the forum. The favoritism, politics and the blatant encouraging of bullying and abuse especially towards women.
No one got back to you because this site is maintained so poorly that the 'contact us' button has not worked in years. I believe this is on purpose to not get complaints and to hide from LE in regards to countless revenge porn violations and other issues.
Is there anything realistic about incest as it pertains to the fantasy on this site? Not much. I'm the first one to say 99% of real life incest is abuse and disturbing. But on a site like this or in e-books with this material its 18+ 99% consensual and just the fun aspects that seemed to have really started with Kay Parker so its simply fun here. Still better than non consent which is rape in real life and rape and abuse in fiction, but people still get off to it.
BTW lit says they don't allow rape....have you seen their non consent section? All you need to know about the hypocrisy here.
You should contact me through feedback with an e-mail I can respond to. Would like to continue this conversation.
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